Barbara Writes

Dec 14, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

JumpingThrough Hoops

I jump through hoops for my girl
She is so hard to love and cherish
I just can’t find the precious words
To make her see I love her dearest

I touch her gently ever careful
She thrusts me away every time
What can I say to make it right?
To make her see our love is tight

I pray before I speak to her
Hoping to help her see I'm right
What she thinks is not the truth
I only want what’s best for her

I show her sympathy mixed with love
She takes offense and runs away
The pain she feels is much too deep
She’s hard to appease when she hurts

I see her heart breaking down
From the pressures of her stress
I see her dying here before me
She binds my hands behind my back

She is so beautiful, soft, and sweet
I wish she knew the truth I share
Behind those eyes, I see she's broken
Nothing I do can fix her now

I jump through hoops to calm her heart
Getting burned by her fire
In the end I test the waters, and
Love was sweet just like always

— Barbara Writes, Dec 14, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

Critiques

yenti

17 years 5 months ago

Hoops

and loops of feelings run around keeping the read and telling a story, will we ever know the real end, or do we take your word for it, still many feelings to come. If that barrier ever comes down the flood will be huge. Lovely read there as usual, Yours Ian.T

Barbara Writes

17 years 5 months ago

Ian

I enjoyed your comments thanks for sharing. though i am not sure what you mean. Respectfully Yours, Barbara

yenti

17 years 5 months ago

Barbara

Talking of people not letting you in, no matter how you try, but still understanding their ways, it seemed to me to be that unconditional love we hold for our children, and one day there may come a time, when they realise that we love them because they are our children, or even a friend. Then the flood begins. Yours Ian.T

Barbara Writes

17 years 5 months ago

Thanks Ian

When I wrote this I did not know how it would come out or be interpreted. My hubby said he had to jump through hoops and those words keep nudging me to write this poem so I finally started writing and when I finish I proof read several times back and forth between notepad, Microsoft word, and the posting page until it felt right. Then I immediately posted it. I am amazed at the interpretation from you fine folks. I jump many hoops my teens, family, and friend. It obviously came out in this piece What is your meaning of the floods that begin? Thanks for the kind remarks Respectfully Yours, Barbara

yenti

17 years 5 months ago

Floods

Of feelings and love when people realise that your love has always been there and is unconditional, something which children find it hard to see, yet give out from birth. Yours Ian.T

Barbara Writes

17 years 5 months ago

Thanks Ian

I really appreciate your comment and insight into my poem, it is refreshing. Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Ink Dragon

17 years 5 months ago

This is really touching

I take it this goes out to a close friend or relation of yours. When I read it, it put me in mind of a daughter or sister. It is always hard to talk to people we love when we can clearly see that they are deceiving themselves about something or other. More often than not, they will be offended by our words. I hope you will not be offended *winks* by my pointing out two minor inconsistencies I think I might have spotted: l.13 mix=mixed l.22 true=truth Respectfully, ID

Barbara Writes

17 years 5 months ago

ID

Thanks for the suggestions. I have made the changes. Thanks for sharing you comment. I truly appreciate it Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Ink Dragon

17 years 5 months ago

You were lucky

I was wearing my new glasses! Have just read "Farting in my ear" and loved it! You´re very welcome, ID

Lonnie

17 years 5 months ago

Kudos, Barbara!

wonderfully written piece about the special love a parent has for a child! Your tender poem is chocked full of the harsh reality that many parents face today in dealing with their offspring! Great job!

Barbara Writes

17 years 5 months ago

Thanks Lonnie

I certainly have been there and when they all leave the nest, they are on their own to make their way. Really appreciate your feedback. Respectfully Yours, Barbara

weirdelf

17 years 5 months ago

Touchingly beautiful Barbara,

and very skill writing, it flows so gently I kept thinking it was in full rhyme! You have used some rhyme, half rhyme and repetition with a deft touch. Just one tiny thing, stanza 2 line 2 thrust thrusts cheers, Jess

Barbara Writes

17 years 5 months ago

Jess

Glad you like it. I tried to rhyme the whole poem in the beginning but it came out so fast as i was writing i left it as it was. I usually use a rhyming book after writing but felt it flow just as good this way. Thanks again for the grammar lesson thought i would get through this one with an error. Thanks, what does deft touch means, glad this one got such high regards from you. Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Barbara Writes

17 years 5 months ago

Jess

Barbara Writes

17 years 5 months ago

Jess

Barbara Writes

17 years 5 months ago

did not mean to post so many time

Respectfully Yours, Barbara

weirdelf

17 years 5 months ago

deft means quick skillfull,

a deft touch is like a painter who uses a singles stroke to show a lot, but you don't see the stroke. cheers, Jess

Rett

17 years 5 months ago

uh Jess, I don't want to scare you

but, did you notice there is a dragon sneaking up on you? Respectfully, Rett: "It’s impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside." Purplemoondoll

weirdelf

17 years 5 months ago

eeeeek and a kookaburra toooo!

the bastards bushwacked me! See you in hell. cheers, Jess

Barbara Writes

17 years 5 months ago

Jess

Ah! a wonderful compliment the most gracious i could ever have gotten. It surprises me that this one did so well to get that type of comment. Thanks always (hugz) Respectfully Yours, Barbara