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God's Sweet Angels

Three little sisters, so innocent, so sweet,

passed from this life  tragically before it was complete.

They had so much potential, their lives only just begun,

everything to live for, now all is left undone.
 

The older at eleven, the first one to arrive,

the oldest of the sisters, was mama’s little helper.

Only a young girl, yet brave beyond her years,

so on that tragic night she went back for baby sister.
 

The middle only seven years, lived her short life with zing ,

mischievous and daring with an independent heart.

Frolicsome in nature, with her sisters danced and sang,

she did not know on that dark night that they were soon to part.
 

The baby not yet two, a tiny blond haired beauty,

like a fragile rosebud, life just beginning to unfold.

A cloud of curls around her head, the blue eyes of a cutie,

no way to know her future, her story left untold.
 

All precious, fragile gifts from God as all His children are,

grown beneath their mother’s heart, listening to the steady beat.

Each one a treasured miracle, all cherished gemstones rare,

how could we know their short lives would be as shooting stars?
 

Gone but not forgotten, each memory bittersweet,

bright lights each one, now shine on us from heaven.

Flowers in God’s bouquet, together now complete,

called from this earth by God above, to wait for us in heaven.

— Debra Bryant, Dec 12, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Kentucky, USA

Favorite Poets: A few of my favorites., Dylan Thomas, Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night, Robert Frost, The Road Not Taken, Maya Angelou, Phenomenal Woman, Emily Dickinson, There Is Another Sky , Elizabeth Barrett Browning, How Do I Love Thee? Let Me Count The Ways, Shel Silverstein, Where The Sidewalk Ends, Edgar Allen Poe, A Dream Within a Dream, Margaret Atwood, Night Poem

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sissy11897

17 years 5 months ago

God's sweet angels

I love this poem Debbie. You did an awesome job.
Debra Bryant

Debra Bryant

17 years 5 months ago

God's Sweet Angels

Thank you for your comments Sissy...you know that your thoughts are very important to me. Debbie
Rett

Rett

17 years 5 months ago

Debra, very touching poem

Brought tears to this old man's eyes. Beautifully written! Respectfully, Rett: "The people of America must really like idiots, look at EVERYONE in Washington." Rett
Debra Bryant

Debra Bryant

17 years 5 months ago

God's Sweet Angels

Thank you very much Rett. I really appercite your comments and coaching. This was writtrn from my heart about a tragedy that happened to my sister long ago. Again, my thanks; Debbie
Debra Bryant

Debra Bryant

17 years 5 months ago

God's Sweet Angels

Thank you for taking the time to read and for your comments, I appreciate every ones feed back. Sincerely, Debbie
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 5 months ago

Debbie

A beautiful write. Thank you for posting it.
Debra Bryant

Debra Bryant

17 years 5 months ago

Linda

Thank you for taking the time to read it . I appreciate your comments. Sincerely; Debbie
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Notso

17 years 5 months ago

Heartfelt

I could feel your pain and loss in the words. Excellent read. Your heart is on your sleeve. Good job. Notso
Debra Bryant

Debra Bryant

17 years 5 months ago

Notso

Thank you very much for your comments, I always appreciate feedback from others and am glad that you took the time to read. Sincerely; Debbie
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poewriter58

17 years 5 months ago

Debra

Suggestions 2nd line eliminate the word so you seemed to have lost the "beat" or meter in the second stanza the word heart you have rhymed it with part why not rhyme the first and third lines then the basis of the poem is good but the entire poem is missing the meter read your poems aloud and see how they sound. Are the running smoothly or do you have abrupt endings and starts and stops a closer look and a minor re write is what I would suggest for this poem Chrys
Debra Bryant

Debra Bryant

17 years 5 months ago

Chrys,

I took out the "so" in line 2 as you suggested...and I will be looking at this more closely to work on the meter and then re write Thank you~ Debbie
Debra Bryant

Debra Bryant

17 years 5 months ago

Ross,

Thank you for reading and taking the time and effort to comment. I appreciate your efforts, but do not fully comprehend the meaning as I am so new at writing poetry. Please forgive my lack of knowledge. Sincerely~ Debbie
Robert Melliard

Robert Melliard

17 years 5 months ago

Loss

Of all the varying degrees of grief caused by a loved one's death, I imagine that losing a child or (even worse) two or three children, must be the hardest to bear. I have afriend who lost her eighteen-year-old daughter recently and she is devastated, but with younger kids the pain may be even sharper. Your poem is very poignant. If you are interested in the subject of the potential pitfalls of rhyming poetry, however, please see my comment about rosschandler's last poem. Your word-order is sometimes a little forced in order to achieve a rhyme. Best Wishes, Robert.
Debra Bryant

Debra Bryant

17 years 5 months ago

Thank you Robert,

I appreciate, as always when anyone takes the time to read and comment on my poetry. This loss happened to my sister 23 years ago, and it was a devastating blow. I will be editing my work and reposting soon, so keep watching. I will also check out your comment re; rosschandler. Sincerely~ Debbie
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 5 months ago

Well. OK

So I finally figured out how to get the the poetry I'm interested in! Geez, it took me long enough. I like this a lot, so full of sadness. "An armed populace is the last defense against tyrannical government": Race
Debra Bryant

Debra Bryant

17 years 5 months ago

Yes...

It was a devastating blow to my sister and the entire family, but I am glad you liked it. Sincerely~ Debbie