The Stain

this one kicks serious ass. the opening and closing stanzas are my favorite. 2nd and 4th stanzas trip up my tongue a bit, but i can't see a better way to get across what you do, than what you have written. also love "with your feet turned backwards" lotsa word fun in here, too, along with the feeling. bravo. N

Excellent writing, I truly perceive the indifference of the subject, greatly expressed across the page. Bravo, M

This is really good. "polish the daisies, water the chair." You definetly got the feeling of indifference across.

I'd just read it but decided to post my poem before I commented. I was JUST about to comment on : " go to sleep and get no rest " when it was still " got to sleep ". I thought it was funny. anyway, another beauty. I love your poetry.. it's so poignant and heartbreaking and very beautiful. I enjoyed reading this and am now shushing my heart. wonder when those puppies start to heal.. kudos, my good man.

My sweet Moonman ` you just blew away the *me*... ~A "Speech is blasphemy. Silence a lie. Above speech and silence is a way out." I-tuan.

Richard Sounds like you have had one hell of a day! electricblue

this s a great poem. I love the way this flow really felt this one. Respectfully Yours, Barbara

You certainly know the nook and crannies of the cookie cutter lives we tend to create. And you are able to feel those cracked spaces and the pain they cause for someone else who doesn't even realize just how hard they are slamming the wall on their face. Powerful stuff! This property Is Protected By Rott and Weiler

where you knocked me this time Richard. Don't you know you ain't supposed to do that to a man with glasses? Dad blast yore hide you cantankerous old man, you sure wrote a kickass poem! Respectfully, Rett: "The people of America must really like idiots, look at EVERYONE in Washington." Rett

MY dear freND, another excellent piece from u. smooth flow, with intense vocabs. dont heve much to comment. HUG ZARUL

I agree with all the above comments. It just went together in a crazy sort of way with the discord loud and clear. Watering the chair..... Loved it. Patty

hmmm... "watering chairs"? I like this picture so much that I can't seem to get it out of my head. what a wonderful poem! I had lots of fun reading it and I agree with all of the above. how about "a bit too late to wonder why" instead of " and too late"? it spices up the last line and you build more of a bridge to the line before it. just a suggestion :-) all in all a great write that I'm surely going to come back to!

Richard, Excellent write Sir. I really like the choice of title, and the last verse. wcw

all those who have already commented on the polishing of the daisies and the watering of the chair! Another one that made me smile and chuckle. Thanks for sharing, ID

Thank-you for yet another great read. Your eyes of perception can see right through me. Notso

Hi Richard, I've been wanting to comment on your work for a while now because i enjoy reading it. Such a sad read this one but beautifully written "Can you feel the way I hurt for you" Bang! That sums it all up Great stuff Richard ~Stella

great poem richard lots of feeling in this one and creative imagery you just get better and better as an anti socialist I have many lost battles and selfish wars but nothing kicks up a good spat then taking on warriors and fine intellectuals the admiration of their armour stuns me sometimes "let cry havoc and let loose the dogs of war" William Shakespeare

I don't know what more to say then that which has been said A fine piece of writing. This has to be your best yet and we go back quite a ways. I just love the third stanza , that alone says something. Excellent work my friend Chrys

The only problem I had was the second stanza.With poems that have a certain rhyme scheme,I tend to get into the timing of it,and it seemed to trip a little as I read.But timing,i know,is not the most important factor in a write.Its what we choose to write about,and how we flesh that subject into crisp,eye catching words.You did that here.You made the self indulgence of your unnamed character be felt strongly by the reader,and its sadness was evident,as well.Good work,Richard. I have submitted new poetry.I want you to take a look,as I always welcome you to look at my works. Your friend,in peace, Scott.