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A Touch of Heavy

Sometimes my head seems much too heavy for me to carry.
The overload of wishing and humming those songs that rip you open,
are most times a moment to lengthy to bare.

Indulgence.
Not a viable solution these days.

My shoulders are aged and slumped and I can’t move the weight much longer.
I don’t want to push and shove it no more. I don’t want to shift and replace it again.
Don’t want to excuse or power paint it. Can’t do the “Maybe, it was meant to be,” one more time.
There are only so many sidewalks to leave a shadow on. Only a few choice uncovered corners ,
still detached and forlorn enough to offer a breather.

And I do so need a breather.

There has to a bag or suitcase, some kind of tote, waiting full to bustin’ with my answers. But I don’t see a place wide enough for it to hide. And if that’s the case, then the answer I seek is that I have no answers.
And that needs no sack to lie in.



By: K. Mulroney


— Rottiestyl, Dec 11, 2008

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Region, Country: USA - Illinois, USA

Favorite Poets: Shakespeare, Emily Dickinson, Edgar Allen Poe

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themoonman

themoonman

17 years 5 months ago

Rottiestyl...

enjoyed the read very much... it carries a theme that is easy for me to relate to... for I've had the same kind of thoughts... but you said it! and very well too... thanks for submitting... Richard
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Arrow

17 years 5 months ago

This is one weary poem-

so you've achieved your intent. I love the image of the over-full head and there are some great lines here, esp. "There are only so many sidewalks to leave a shadow on. Only a few choice uncovered corners," & "There has to a bag or suitcase, some kind of tote, waiting full to bustin’ with my answers. But I don’t see a place wide enough for it to hide." I think you've used end stops really well. I wonder if some of the lines might benefit from some breaks, though. Line 3: bare --> bear. Enjoyed it.
Rottiestyl

Rottiestyl

17 years 5 months ago

I tend to just write. I pay

I tend to just write. I pay little or no attention to the mechanics and simple English, it would seem. Glad you liked it and yes, some lines could use some polishing but when it works for me, I tend to leave it. Not a knock in you at all, simply a writers flaw in me. Thanks for reading! This property Is Protected By Rott and Weiler