catacombs

you know that some of my favourite lines of yours are in this piece, don´t you? So what can I say that I haven´t said about it yet? Give the girl five stars, all of you! Love, ID

great write. Thanx for letting us look inside. Notso

love the name you've chosen... this poem is very good... great flow and loved the fluid way it fell off my tongue... a great read! there are a couple of spots I think you may have overlooked while editing the piece... in catacombic ... I thought could use an "a" or "my" inbetween... loved the image of the catacomb... evelopes... I think you meant envelopes... loved the piece... enjoyed reading... Richard

Exceptional writing! This part inparticular blew me away: 'memories die and memories weep I bow my head in restless sleep' I have to ask, it says you're in Germany, so is English your second language? M

she´s really Miss Understatement, our proprietress. I happen to know that she´s quasi-bilingual, having spent much of her childhood in the US. ID

Colourful imagery in melancholy, I'm sorry, I feel but the last line just throws it off centre.

comment re can write but can't talk in either language reminds me of my annual wintertime visits to Puerto Rico. Except for the loony driving habits of crazy, horn blowing-obsessed drivers thereabouts (in fact, a number of years ago I resolved to quit the PR driving experience ... and've kept since to that resolvement), I've no particular problem with reading their traffic signs ... or at least getting the sense of them, their Spanish, enough to avoid confusion. Just don't ask me to put a Spanish sentence together orally, even a simple one ... or to write a line of it. I've not seen catacombic before. Nice word. Nice choice. Such a skilled write-ress you are. Especially as to vocabulary and language abilities, you nail 'em and jail 'em really, really fine. For my pleasure, of course. Thanx, Chuck PS: By the way, I do see an inadvertent space before the comma in your second line above. Which is eminently---and easily---fixable.

you´ve made it into Evolution! Congrats! Ink

This is an excellent write. The title is good, it evokes a sense of dusty, hidden intricacies that somehow mirror the emotions of the poem as they are revealed. I particularly like the last lines... 'I understand its slow attack: I’ve fucked it up. now it strikes back.' ... because they are something of a shock, preceded as they are by the more ethereal and emotional content of the rest of the poem, and infuse a bit of anger as well, that makes the read more personal. I don't know if I am explaining myself properly, but those lines make the work more immediate, and more intimate, to me. They somehow bring the poem down to earth, as it were. They serve to move the regret and sadness from the merely emotional into the realm of the physical, perhaps? I would personally not change the last line at all. Respectfully, Jim "An armed populace is the last defense against tyrannical government": Race

I felt this write in my spine. and that my friend is what poetry is... the shaking of the soul. look forward to more. -DarkinAz-

Imogen brand what a beautiful poem you have drawn my attention and lots of other readers. I love the way you you lots of detail in a very poetic way.

well rhimed and meticulousy writtne poem. i enjoyed reading it.

This is definitely one of my favourite poems, have returned a number of times to read it...the images and emotions it evokes are remarkable. and now the future starts to scream the present’s just a blurry dream I cannot see, my eyes are blind in catacombic state of mind I can relate to this stanza and so love it as much as I hate it...if that makes sense.