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A Walk In My City, Perspective
Perspective 1
Walk a little quicker now, your legs are shaking
Don’t forget to remember to call me when you go to bed
I don’t want to stay up all night in worry
Outside the sky has fallen
A deeper moon scene has rose, but welcomed everyone else
The night-lights on the city are beacons to welcome you home
Forget to feel fear as you dash down the street
Every light post you pass is a check on the map
The thieving liars on the sidewalks stare you down
With my eyes to the cityscape
I widen my mouth and raise my glass to the fallen chandelier
I remember walking slow, down the boulevard, but my memories don’t
On your staircase you lean on the white walls
Up to your daunting door
Let yourself in
Play a record and thank yourself for pouring yourself a drink
Dance alone in the moonlight and collapse on your bed
Dial my tone and say goodnight, and kiss the phone goodbye
My city is full of dreams
No one ever fills
My city is full of love
No one ever feels
Perspective 2
Stand alone waving goodbye
No hug, no kiss goodnight?
Of course I’ll call before I fall asleep
Outside the sun is gone and morning swiftly moves in
He refuses to walk me home, for fear he might do, what he always wanted to do
But he never will
He forgets the world when I’m in his eyes
He lets go of others to keep me happy every night
All I want is to hear his feelings, from his lips
With my eyes to the window, I am nothing but an ant
I see him in his bathrobe toasting to the stars to guide me home
I remember walking slow, in the park at night, but my memories don’t
In his chair he sits in shame wondering, “what am I doing?”
His empty bed leaves him cold at night
And he is getting tired of leaving the TV on, to not feel alone
He walks to the bathroom, grabs a handful of pills
Stumbles to his bed, too numb to feel a thing
He answers my call, just to hear my voice, and say goodnight
My city is full of what ifs
No one really knows
My city is full of love
No one ever feels
Critiques
Jo Latimer
17 years 6 months ago
Very good stuff
Stella
17 years 6 months ago
I like the idea of the two