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Where I've Been

Where I've Been

Ten miles out of Jackson town
Just going nowhere fast
Was walking down the highway
Alone and busted flat

Lady kindly stopped her car
Said I looked allright
And she was kind of lonely
Would I share her room tonight.

Thumbed on over to Natchez
Slept down by the bluff
On the seedy side of town
Where things get kind of rough

Woke up with my money gone
But I still had my head
Thanking God for what I had
I could have woke up dead

Sitting in a small café
Near the town of Kenner
Hadn't eaten in three days
Was feeling somewhat thinner

Waitress bought me a burger
And topped it off with fries
Then offered me some loving
If I would tell her lies

Cleaning up a place one night
Stepped out to get some air
I woke up in a dumpster
And blood was everywhere

Struggling to my knees
Somehow I got out
Staggered to the dim lit street
A cop then heard my shout

Then made my way to Houston
I helped a trucker load
Twenty dollars and a meal
Again I hit the road

I don't know where I'm heading
But I know where I've been
I would fight with Satan himself
Than go back home again
— Rett, Dec 09, 2008

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Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: Dickenson, Longfellow

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RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 6 months ago

Nicely done, Rett

Rough for a 14 - 16 year old, that is for sure. You really expressed your storytelling skills with this one. ~ Ronda (Would it be bad to say that it reminds me of a country song if I mean it in a complimentary way?)
Rett

Rett

17 years 6 months ago

Thanks Ronda

Yeah, it was rough, but rougher with my dad. I had to keep moving to keep from being found. Didn't dare stay long with mama till I turned 18 and was safe. I appreciate it a lot Ronda and no, I don't mind if it sounds like a country song I am flattered. Respectfully, Rett: "The people of America must really like idiots, look at EVERYONE in Washington." Rett
MK

Mason King

17 years 6 months ago

A seriously cool and

A seriously cool and somewhat amusing Tale, You've proved here that Poems don't have to be Turgid emotional expressions but stories aswell, Bravo for that ;) M
Rett

Rett

17 years 6 months ago

Thanks Mason

People can get through rough times and come out somewhat sane after all. *L* I appreciate the read and comment. Respectfully, Rett: "The people of America must really like idiots, look at EVERYONE in Washington." Rett
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zarul

17 years 6 months ago

hi

what a great and hypnotizing storyteller you are, my dear fren. such a great poem. HUG ZARUL
Rett

Rett

17 years 6 months ago

Thank you zarul

Now you know why family means so much to me. I appreciate your reading my friend. Respectfully, Rett: "The people of America must really like idiots, look at EVERYONE in Washington." Rett
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 6 months ago

Rett

what an awful childhood your had. But look at the man you have become in spite of or maybe because of your trials. Darned interesting write.
Rett

Rett

17 years 6 months ago

Thanks linda

Hey, you play the cards you're dealt and make the best hand out of them you can. Others had it worse. I wouldn't change it. I appreciate you commenting my friend. Respectfully, Rett: "The people of America must really like idiots, look at EVERYONE in Washington." Rett
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 6 months ago

Rett

This is a really good story line of your teenage years. great write as usual. Respectfully Yours, Barbara
Rett

Rett

17 years 6 months ago

Thanks Barbara

I wouldn't change them, but I wouldn't live through them again either. I appreciate it. Respectfully, Rett: "The people of America must really like idiots, look at EVERYONE in Washington." Rett
NM

Nature Mithya

17 years 6 months ago

lol rett... how many times have I told you ....

...check your pockets before going out with a girl of doubtful character. Good you were flat broke before you went with her; how clever and dignified as you blame her for taking the money which was not there. Can't blame Satan for not fighting you. He must have thought streets would be safer without you.
Rett

Rett

17 years 6 months ago

Ah Nature

Don't you know, never have money when you sleep at a strange woman's house. *G* Respectfully, Rett: "The people of America must really like idiots, look at EVERYONE in Washington." Rett
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Nature Mithya

17 years 6 months ago

Lol

Got to learn a thing or two from you. Thanks for the advice should come in handy in my next rebirth. Smiles.
Rett

Rett

17 years 6 months ago

Thank you Janice

But life is what makes you the person you are. It was rough, but without those experiences I wouldn't be me so I wouldn't change them. It worked out in the end my friend. You play the hand you're dealt. *S* Respectfully, Rett: "The people of America must really like idiots, look at EVERYONE in Washington." Rett
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

Nice! kind of reminds me of

Nice! kind of reminds me of some modern day Waylon Jennings song, the whole reckless vagabond feel to it. Loved it, as always peace and love Katie
Rett

Rett

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks Katie

I did this a while back and was going back through and found a couple spots I didn't like. I was most definitely a "vagabond". *LOL* Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water." "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 2 months ago

Where I've Been

Rett, Very interesting story Rett. You wouldn't want to live through it again, but like you said, it made you who you are today. I feel anyone who has lived through tough times as a child has a better chance at adapting to these hard economic times of today. ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
Rett

Rett

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks Janice

You are right there. If need be I can take bacon grease, two eggs and a couple of stale slices of bread and feed two people on it and have them enjoy it. I know a good bit of poor folks meals if you can call them that. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water." "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein