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An alternating current

He loves her morning bustle round their home:
her daily, dogged war on dirt and mess,
in which he lends a less committed hand.

But he hates her when she looks at him
disdainfully, because his clothes are shabby
or his shoes are getting old.

He loves her when she wriggles near at night:
he loves the warmth that flows between them,
through skin and flesh and bone.

But how he hates her when she turns away,
deliberately rejecting love - as if
her life was full of more important things.

He loves and hates and hates and loves her:
an alternating current is at work.
When hate's in charge, he simply waits
till love returns...

— Robert Melliard, Dec 05, 2008

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Region, Country: Asturias, Spain

Favorite Poets: Chaucer, Shakespeare, Du Bellay, Metaphysicals, Petrarch, Dante, Baudelaire, Lorca, Becquer, Coleridge

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Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 6 months ago

An alternating current

I liked your take on this. You have shown the ups and downs of a relationship with your write~I think the last line could be a bit stronger? Just me maybe~ _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________
Robert Melliard

Robert Melliard

17 years 6 months ago

Hi Janice,

Many thanks for taking the trouble to read and comment on this poem. I was surprised that no one had said anything about it before because I believe there is a love-hate element in most long-term relationships. I need some time to think about a possible change to the ending. Best wishes, Robert.
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 6 months ago

Robert

Like the sine wave, you can see the ups and downs of the relationship. And you are quite correct - there is a love/hate to every relationship. There are times when I just want to hold Jon and never let him go, and other times when I want to smack him! It's natural, I think. Nice writing! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "Does Rudolph fail the safety inspection if his nose is burnt out? And where does he go? I don't think he'd fit in the bay at the Jiffy Lube." Happy holidays, y'all!
Rett

Rett

17 years 6 months ago

Robert, I really like this

All relationships have their alternating currents. The trick is to prevent short circuits. Well done sir! Respectfully, Rett: "For all you Scrooges who don't like Santa Claus or the true meaning of Christmas, BAH HUMBUG! For the rest of you, MERRY CHRISTMAS!" Rett