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The Rooms of Your Soul

Rooms of Your Soul

I’m walking around the rooms of your soul,
Places you live and love and work and play,
Finding unbroken spaces, rich, and whole,
Comfortable spots where I want to stay.

I move through your eyes into sharp-witted hope,
Stars that brighten until first light breaks day;
When darkness is over, then we can cope;
If tomorrow never comes, take today.

I turn into your mind, an open book,
Where there is no malice contained, or fear.
The shelves are full of truths for me to look
And consider that which I hold so dear.

I enter your heart where fire is burning;
An easy chair invites, cozy and warm.
I must stay; there will be no returning.
Your heart’s safe haven though there be hard storm.

I run in the fields of your soul where
Landscapes smell of rain and alfalfa hay;
And gutsy winds blow gentle freedom there;
Sea grass meets sand and waves at sun’s last ray.

— deelilah, Dec 03, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwest USA, USA

Favorite Poets: E.E. Cummings, Robert W. Service, Emily Dickenson

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Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 6 months ago

The Rooms of Your Soul

D, I liked the way you described this person. Beautiful piece here. I would let you know which lines I liked, but they were all delightful~! _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________
deelilah

deelilah

17 years 6 months ago

Thank you Janice

Thanks for the good words. My own favorite line is: and gutsy winds blow gentle freedom there. That is in Wyoming, and gutsier winds you've never seen--but Wyoming is a great free place. D.
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 6 months ago

This is good

I love the first verse, it speaks to me of familiarity and deep, deep love felt for a long time. The rhythm of this piece is intricate as well, very lovely how it flows along. In the last verse, you put me there on farm and shoreline, vividly no, this isn't good this is very good change nothing. Respectfully, Jim
deelilah

deelilah

17 years 6 months ago

Thank you Jim

for the high praise. It seems you've captured the intent of this poem right on. I wrote it for my husband of 27 years. I am also glad you found the rhythm pleasing. That is is something I work on. Thank you again for reading and taking the time to respond. Deelilah
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 6 months ago

Dee

Wow is all I can say. I have places in my memory where I wish I could stay. I liked this one. Awesome Patty
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 6 months ago

Well then...

very descriptive and inviting rooms you've shared with us... all I need is the remote... enjoyed taking the tour of rooms... Richard
deelilah

deelilah

17 years 6 months ago

Thank you Patty and Richard

I'm glad you like the rooms I've chosen to live my life in. I wish we could all visit and stay in each others rooms for a while. Yours, D.
deelilah

deelilah

17 years 5 months ago

Thank you Patty and Richard

Thanks for your input. I'm always grateful for that. Sorry to be so late in replying; I've been separated from my internet connection for about a week and having major withdrawal as a result. Sometimes I need to practice what I preach, like: 'take today'. Yours, D.
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 6 months ago

I second that

Always look for the bright side...... Patty
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orgami

17 years 5 months ago

remember then

meaning in visitations was long long ago on the pacific beach with rainiers floating vision like mount fuji exotic and elusive for my first time eyes standing on an embankment while the mad sea tore at the fragment of headland cool salted mists and dune grasses singing in the subtle degrees beneath the rage of the sea and Washington State with its log trucks and Sitka spruce and convience stores selling liqour and cigarettes with iron bars on their windows sipping coffee in the huge forest the huge ferns and banana slugs sunlight shafts like igneious intrusions in rock faces sparkling and soul filling your poem is kind
deelilah

deelilah

17 years 5 months ago

Orgami

What do like to be called? Your comments written in poetry are always a joy to read. I've wondered how it would be to be in a conversation with you. Poetry must be the language you think in--like English or Spanish, etc. Kind? Well, I guess that must be how I see this person. I am fortunate, don't you think, to have found comfortable spots, where I want to stay? Thank you for reading and commenting. Yours, Deelilah
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orgami

17 years 5 months ago

soul settled

lived between three "parents" homes for twenty four years then away on the run with women of vastly reaching intellect and eccentrical orbits of being saw heard touched places I had only read in books immortalized in poems and lyrics waking up realizing that poetry had become my mother tongue one day sleeping on a rock cut while the zenith of stars shone back like dreams blazing of all the dreamers i ache still wondering if this is the one im free she says i love you she whispers songs from U Tube tear me down kindness i hold the door holding on so much to let go I love happiness poems it makes me want to believe thanks Deelilah
deelilah

deelilah

17 years 5 months ago

27 years

I remember reading somewhere; I think it is your age; there is time to believe in something or someone someday one day. Deelilah
Rett

Rett

17 years 5 months ago

Soory to be so late

reading this deelilah. Wonderful write here. One or two slightly rough spots, at least for me (but each of us writes differently) but all in al, I really like this. I absolutely adore this line. "I move through your eyes into sharp-witted hope,". Well done! Respectfully, Rett: "Each man is good in the sight of the Great Spirit.." (Sitting Bull)
deelilah

deelilah

17 years 5 months ago

Hi Rett

'sharp-witted hope' I have a husband who makes puns all day long--but he sees the positive side of things, more often than me--that's where I got that. You two would have a good time, I think, discussing global warming and a few other political misunderstandings. I'd like to know the spots in the poem you felt were rough. Maybe I can improve it. I am glad you liked it though. Yours, D.
Rett

Rett

17 years 5 months ago

Sorry about taking so long

I've been busier than a one legged man in a kicking contest. Stars that brighten until first light breaks day;(a little awkward read aloud. Possibly try---Stars shine bright until break of day--just a suggestion) Where there is no malice contained, or fear(again a little awkward read aloud--Possibly--Where there is no malice or fear) Your heart’s safe haven though there be hard storm. (suggestion---My safe haven though there be storm) Just some suggestions to show what I mean. It is first and foremost your poem so use or discard as you see fit. They are only meant to illustrate what I was saying. *S* It's a beautiful poem. Respectfully, Rett: "It’s impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside." Purplemoondoll