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What The Vampire Really Wants

This is adult, dark and evil.
 

let's stop for a brief moment
I always do before my hunger
overcomes my pleasure
because of all the many moments
of subtle hunt
and struggling liquid feast
this one is my favorite.

here you lie, so innocent
so lovely and so young,
a slow shudder of expectant certainty
pumping smooth and fearful
through your sweet warm naked flesh
imprisoned in my cold embrace
firm breasts, soft skin and flaring hips
pressed so tight against
my almost overpowering want

this is the moment
that I love most of all
this brief instance pulsing dark between
my pleasure of anticipation and
your slow and helpless death
your wide dark eyes so horrified
not at the certainity of being dead
but rather at the dreadful realization
that the pleasure of my killing you
will make you beg me not to stop

this is my deepest of delights
your terror feeds my
warped and squirming soul
this is what keeps me alive through
long centuries of remembered sun
the eternity of rotting dark I must endure
when each night turns to burning day:
the eager horror of
my innocent and helpless prey
struggling in the ecstacy
of slowly draining death

so turn your pretty face away,
that's it,
arch your back and
raise your arms above your head,
stretch out your lovely pulsing throat,
So I may slide my fangs into your
hot rich pumping blood
and start to feed:
Ah yes...
whimper, if you wish.

 


— Race_9togo, Dec 03, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Earth Vicinity (within a five light-year radius), ZZC

Favorite Poets: John Donne, T.S. Eliot, Serendipity, Emily Dickenson, Kailashana, Charles Bukowski, Kabir, Rett, Dalton, W. B. Yeats, William Blake, Rainer Maria Rilke, and many other Neopoet poets; Neopoet has heavily influenced my poetry and my ability to write it well.

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Critiques

T

Tink

17 years 6 months ago

there is not much to say on this one...

There really isn't much to say. I enjoyed this, which "scares" me as much as knowing you wrote it disquiets you. :) Thank you. Live, Laugh and Love (and don't forget to write) Tink
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 5 months ago

Thank you tink, I am glad

Thank you tink, I am glad that you enjoyed it! "An armed populace is the last defense against tyrannical government": Race
Rett

Rett

17 years 6 months ago

Jim, I am not much for horror, but

this was good. I am always disquieted by the fact that such darkness resides in the world and also, deep deep down in the hidden reachs of my soul there is always a tiny flicker that relates. Like you I find this scary as heck. All in all, a dang good write though. Respectfully, Rett: "I once had a handle on life, but it broke." Rett
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 5 months ago

Thanks

Thank you Rett. As my wife sometimes reminds me, without evil there can be no good. Even so, I'd take the good without the evil in a second! Thanks again Jim "An armed populace is the last defense against tyrannical government": Race
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

17 years 5 months ago

What the Vampire really wants

hello my friend. I just love this poem. I was so sad it had to stop. I love the anticipation the build to the climax. The sadness it was over so quickly. Then have to wait again to start all over again. The innocent pleasures of naked flesh. Waiting without struggle inprisoned in this embrace. The anticipation. This ecstacy fulfilled. Wonderful - I want more! Electricblue This vision came alive a living moment for a short while until tomorrow comes again.
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 5 months ago

You are welcome

I cannot promise more, since I do little horror poetry...but I'll certainly try! Glad you enjoyed it so much, Jim "An armed populace is the last defense against tyrannical government": Race
Debra Bryant

Debra Bryant

17 years 5 months ago

Jim,

"Scary" is totally inadequate...as would be my effort to critique your work. I see the talent in your poetry. Sincerely; Debbie
Debra Bryant

Debra Bryant

17 years 5 months ago

Jim,

I hope that I did not offend you by my previous comment on "What the Vampire Really Wants". If I did that was not my intent, I wanted to convey the inadequacy that I felt in attempting to critique your work, which I feel is vastly superior to my own attempts at poetry. For what it is worth, when all is said and done, I very much liked this piece. Sincerely~ Debbie
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 5 months ago

Debra....

You did not offend me at all! I have a thick skin! I understood what you said completely; I was very (and pleasantly) surprised by it, and I thank you for it. Don't know about "vastly superior" though! Perhaps a bit more polished, but if you read some of my other attempts, you'll see why your comment made me laugh! But seriously, I simply didn't have the time to respond to you immediately, for which I apologize. I am glad that you enjoyed this poem. This kind of poetry disturbs me when it comes to me, so I don't do too much of it. Having said that, the few responses I have gotten for it have all been very positive, so I may try my hand at it again, sooner than I thought! Perhaps about a werewolf this time....heehee. As for critiquing my efforts, my previous comment on that subject remains unchanged...please criticise away! If you see something that you think needs work, I very definitely want to hear about it. I always need feedback from people other than my wife :) - it's what brings me down to Earth(!), smacks me upside the head and makes me THINK about what I am writing. Thanks again! Sincerely, Jim P.S. When are we going to be reading another poem from you? "An armed populace is the last defense against tyrannical government": Race
J

Jinxed

17 years 5 months ago

I'll have what the vampire's having...

This poem was remarkable to say the least. You choice of words, imagery, flow and detail was immaculate. It kept me hooked from the beginning and I wanted to read more. I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. Good work.
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 5 months ago

Thank you

for your kind comments, I am very glad that you enjoyed it so much. I am beginning to realize that others think I am good at this horror stuff, so I think I'll try another, to confirm the hypothesus! This time about werewolves, which I think is the other half of the vampire equation....sexual lust on the one hand, savagery and violence on the other. Thanks again, Respectfully, Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 5 months ago

Very well

I shall do it. But I must say, what I have is very, very evily dark. I'll just tell everyone to blame you! ;) thanks for your encouragement Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 5 months ago

OK

I'm going to post it in the morning when I get home. Can't do it here at work cuz the servers edit out all the editing controls, but I'll do it. Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race