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After-Shave

Last night I fell asleep on the couch
again and dreamed
I was a one-eyed salmon
swimming upstream,
it's winter in Ohio
and the sun is rarely seen,
the cold steams my breath
on fast-moving windows
of my youth,
heaven is growing green
somewhere else if it's true
that love is a dog
from hell
lying warm at my feet,
and most of all
I want to fall in love again,
I want to miss your perfectly clean
out-the-door
after-shave Bukowski smell
lingering somewhere
we never went,
somwhere we have
yet to meet.




— Kailashana, Dec 03, 2008

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JL

Jo Latimer

17 years 6 months ago

What can I say

I just like your stuff! Always look forward to your postings. Keep them coming... This seems hopeful & something else I can't quite put my finger on yet. Wistful? Regards, Jo
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W.C.Wampler

17 years 6 months ago

After shave poem

Kail., This was jumbly till you pulled it together at the end. " Aftershave Bukowski smell, lingering somewhere we never went, somewhere we have yet to meet." Thanks, I'm learning. wcw
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 6 months ago

Thank you Jo and WCW…. I

Thank you Jo and WCW.... I write poetry just because... it's my only voice now. Bless you both. ~A Than"Speech is blasphemy. Silence a lie. Above speech and silence is a way out." I-tuan.
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 6 months ago

Anna...

I do hope there is another Bukowski out there for you... always enjoy your writes my friend... Richard
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 6 months ago

Hi Moonman, Well not exactly

Hi Moonman, Well not exactly a Bukowski, but someone who can make shit into poetry.... as one whose poetry has been called *shit* by some..... lol Love you. ~A "Speech is blasphemy. Silence a lie. Above speech and silence is a way out." I-tuan.