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Misanthropy

my lungs are filled with dust and asphalt
with relics and the reek of human bones
our flesh smells like another one's flesh
and a slimy liquid drips
on the skin that hides traps behind it

some are afraid to take off their raiments
that cover their purity and the animal body
which keep them prisoners
I'm afraid to take off, not my raiments,
but my body which kept me
in a carnal fortress
being afraid of curiosity and filth

the stench of their soul
smothers me and I feel so much more
like it enters in my body
to devour my mature lung

I open the windows of my treasure
to see the green of the sky
and the blue of the trees
through glasses of steel that enslave me
in the cellar of my spirit

then I close my windows
because I have seen enough of the lands
that give me a bitter taste
and a wretched impression with every day passed:
humans are walking dead on their feet
smiling cheerfully in shiny illusions
— Unlight, Nov 22, 2008

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Country/Region: Romania

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RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 6 months ago

It is wonderful to see your

It is wonderful to see your work again! This piece is nothing less than what I have grown to expect from you. Very raw and evocative. I notice a couple of places that do not seem to flow as well as the rest. "a lot more" seems very casual and sudden in the midst of the piece, perhaps "so much more" might work there? "enough the lands" - do you want an "of" in there? Powerfully written and impressive. ~ Ronda~ Ronda
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 6 months ago

validation error

my apologies for the double signature and two comments that should have been one - the validation error struck again ~ Ronda
ID

Ink Dragon

17 years 6 months ago

I read the updated version

so I don´t know what Ronda´s talking about, but this version is a five star poem if ever I saw one! Congrats for that perfect piece, ID
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 6 months ago

Misanthropy

Unlight, Another in-depth write here. I enjoyed this piece. Don't know why stumbled on line 5, probably just me? _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________
Unlight

Unlight

17 years 6 months ago

Ink Dragon, thank you for

Ink Dragon, thank you for your appreciation. The fact that I won a new reader makes me more confident in what I write. Janice, line 5 is quite simple to understand (not a big philosophy): "on the skin that hides traps behind it" - here I saw the human like a deadfall (trap). A single entity who is capable to hide behind his/her flesh a multitude of other worlds, beside the one that keep him within its tentacles. I hope you understand now. Greetings!
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 6 months ago

Misanthropy

Unlight, Thanks for explaining, Congratulations on winning a new reader! _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________
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LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Hey there

Just read your poem as part of tonights chat discussion... it was picked by another guest. So thankyou for allowing me into your poetry world. I liked the imagery of your poem.. and found it very morbid...but true. A great piece of work. Liked the writing style. Congrats on a great job Lissa I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 3 months ago

Certainly different but has

Certainly different but has a truth about humanity to it...love the image that humans are walking dead on their feet...awesome awesome. This poem was read on Tink's chat.
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Tink

17 years 3 months ago

Unlight,

During my chat tuesday night, this poem was picked to be read and commented on by my guests. I really enjoyed this one. Almost seems to me about how people just become robots in life and don't really get to enjoy it. And your perspective is truly unique. well done. thanks for sharing. Live, Laugh and Love (and don't forget to write) Tink
Unlight

Unlight

17 years 3 months ago

“we’re doing a cool new

"we’re doing a cool new chat and lucky for you your poem was on the right page in the stream to be read and commented on by eveyone in chat =]" - xDARKxPURPLEx I didn't know that. The lack of inspiration kept me away from this site. I'll be back soon, I guess... Thank you for your appreciation and I'm just as surprised as I am happy to know that my poem was picked on Tink's chat. Thank you, LissaMine, Dark Purple, Katie and Tink Regards, Ionut