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Masterpiece

I've turned pages, looking for you
and now that I've found you
I can begin my work
I'm breathless with anticipation


I've beaten you repeatedly
everchanging pace
slow and meticulous
to fast and furious

I've cracked slime
and layered it with powders
and potions
from little brown vials

You've been whipped
leaving dark, fat lines
within your pale essence
in time they'll fade - I promise

I scoop you out
piles of tan shit
with black spots within
your sweetened layers

I will scorch you now
within the relentless heat
until I pronounce that you've had enough
and render you almost complete

As your flesh cools
I will tarnish your surface
with a coloured fury
Then, my cake will be done!

— infinite_dwarf, Nov 20, 2008

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Region, Country: North Carolina, USA, USA

Favorite Poets: E.A. Poe, Lewis Carroll, Charles Bukowski, Michael McClure, Lawrence Ferlenghetti.

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zarul

17 years 6 months ago

HI JESS

whoa, what a beautiful, hilarious nd 'naughty' poem this is. love it, my poet fren. whoa, again. HUG ZARUL
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 6 months ago

naughty??

Nowt o' th' sort. Just some play on words to make you think of anything but what it is really about. I like cliffhangers sometimes. Writing that just makes you sit and scratch your head, until the very end, and then you laugh at the correlation... thanks, friend! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "If the S.W.A.T team breaks down your door, do they have to replace it later?" - "If you don't pay your exorcist, do you get repossessed?"
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 6 months ago

Jess

For a minute, I thought you were talking about a turkey. Cute write
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 6 months ago

jess

at first I though you were talking about a turkey, but I got to the last line, it all made sense. Cute write
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 6 months ago

a cake?

This has a human feel to me. This work you do sounds like punishment.LOL Cake made from scratch hard satisfying work when completed. Great writing. I am scratching my head lol. Respectfully Yours, Barbara
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Lonnie

17 years 6 months ago

Sheesh! I feel violated!

Great stuff, Jess! Love the wordplay, the rhythm, the general innuendo theme! I rated you a five!
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 6 months ago

Jess

I loved this, another good write, glad I stayed til the end. You are funny and a little tricky. Patty
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Conect11

17 years 4 months ago

I was thinking

Baked Alaska personally. My thought: leave out that it actually is a cake at the end. There's sexiness in mystery, and to that point I'm like "that's cool, I think it's food, but maybe it's not." "Cracked slime," funny stuff, I like your allusions to alchemy in the following lines. Good stuff. Finally, going back to the last line (stanza, actually) I really think you've left two or three lines on the table, something to expand there. Just a thought. Mark W. I like Cal and his dog Napalm I like Ike and his itty-bitty A-bomb everybody got one, I want mine you can order it up on Channel Nine. ~From "Doctor Jeep" by The Sisters of Mercy