Three Wednesday Haikus

Cold bodies curl near
flickering flames of fire light
like moths to a lamp

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Caterpillar silk
hangs loose over dew laden
sun-kissed berry leaves

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Dark falls on silent
unsuspecting little creatures
who move about by day

— infinite_dwarf, Nov 19, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: North Carolina, USA, USA

Favorite Poets: E.A. Poe, Lewis Carroll, Charles Bukowski, Michael McClure, Lawrence Ferlenghetti.

Critiques

Hilton Briscoe

17 years 6 months ago

I Tried!

I tried to read them all out with one breath... I got so close. I failed just after "dark falls on silent". 3 beautiful pieces you have here

infinite_dwarf

17 years 6 months ago

thanks, Hilton!

Interesting endeavor... read all three together. I guess they do kind of all make sense! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "The term "paranoid" would seem to indicate a lack of preparation.... I prefer to be labled "hypervigilant"

RSScheerer

17 years 6 months ago

Short n' sweet

Nice images, good flow within the haiku structure and excellent word choices. Re-count your syllables in the second line of the third, though. I count eight, but only in that one. The others all have the traditional 5,7,5. Normally, I'd say the definition of a haiku has grown and changed some with modern versions, but I know you were working with traditional here. You did a great job with these, Jess! ~ Ronda

Electric Blue

17 years 6 months ago

Three Wednesday Haikus

Jess Short and sweet. I do not really understand what Haikus is. Evan though some people have responed to some of my poetry as this. Guess what i did now know i could do it. lol Electricblue

prayersbyPatty

17 years 6 months ago

Awesome Dwarf

I love them each..... Glad you did three..... Very nice vivid, and dreamy images my favorite was the middle one Patty