The Box

Somehow, the simplicity of this poem is exactly what makes it so appealing. To me, the rhythm and concept of the poem, interplay in such a way that the impression given, is actually both very uncomplicated and at the same time creative and teasing. All in all, a very visual poem, which makes the analytic in you want to start looking for metaphors. But I'll prefer settling with first impression :) The only kind of critizism I can come up with, would probably be the title; that it's sort of stating the obvious. But I think it's the quotation marks. Thanks, I enjoyed reading!

As always I have enjoyed your poem.... ever fresh and clean, neatly hung out for all to see. ;-) ~A Understanding is a perfect snowflake, melting. Anna Ruiz

As always I have enjoyed your poem.... ever fresh and clean, neatly hung out for all to see. ;-) ~A Understanding is a perfect snowflake, melting. Anna Ruiz

I really liked this poem, but I would agree with the previous comment the title spoils it. It seems to be overstating the point, maybe just 'The Basket' or maybe 'the Box' the "MAGIC" seems to make it seem like a childish magic show trick, although maybe that was your intention. I think it would benefit from a more serious title. I loved the simplicty of the language. I'm a big fan of the simple.

A wonderful piece of pure fun. and I love your timing!

Well, you must have some different pixies in your household, then. Mine steal clothing, yours hangs them up neatly. Name your price, I'll buy a couple off you! While you're at it - what's your rate for the ones who will do dishes and cook supper, then? LOL! A humorous write. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "If the S.W.A.T team breaks down your door, do they have to replace it later?" - "If you don't pay your exorcist, do you get repossessed?"