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Nem0x
Nov 15, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Rage And War

Rage And War
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Rage and war have the same principals as water and flowers..
If you feed one with the other it will grow stronger and spread its seeds to the lands beside it.
If not, it will grow fatigued and fade away with time.


— Nem0x, Nov 15, 2008

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themoonman

themoonman

17 years 6 months ago

Hi Leo...

indeed it is true... I think you could add to this one... maybe... fatigue... needs a "d" on the end to make it the correct tense of the word... and I would take "big" out and replace "strong" with "stronger" just suggestions Leo... Welcome to the site... Richard
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Nem0x

17 years 6 months ago

thanks

yeah ok... i appreciate the advice. part of why i joined this site is to improve my english so i'l take any advice i can get.
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Nem0x

17 years 6 months ago

turned out great! :D

hey i did as you said... it turned out great! only problem now is that i can't wright anything... it's like iv'e runned out of gas or something..
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 6 months ago

Don't worry LeO...

Your gas will be back... lol.... it does read better I think... appreciate your response very much... Richard
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Nem0x

17 years 6 months ago

Thanks

thank you very much.... it really feels great getting good reactions from people who read my poems...
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Aden Recreated

17 years 3 months ago

I think that this read more

I think that this read more like a quote instead of a poem--was that your intent? Not complaining , just saying. I enjoyed this and would like to read more of your stuff.. ______________________________ "Your warm and schizophrenic heart" --L'Âme Immortelle, "Lake of Tears" --Aden Recreated
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Nem0x

17 years 3 months ago

i dunno.

i dont really know what this was suppose to be. haha but thx for your commen though :)