Barbara Writes

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A Rose For Your Table (Acrostic)

A rose for your table (Acrostic)

Always and forever

Red is the color
Of your heart
Soft velvety petals a bee’s kiss
Erases the pain for a moment

Frozen in time
Only you will know the meaning when
Rivers run slowly along

Your stretch of woods
Open fields of dandelions
Under your soft clouds
Raining I love you with

The one you choose
A dozen roses wind
Blown vases candle
Light dinners
Emotions run deep

— Barbara Writes, Nov 09, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

Critiques

Mark

17 years 7 months ago

Barbara

Hi Barb, Barb I would take out the Simple line there in the first stanza and there it will be :) OR add an S to Rose (Roses) in the title and remove the fist line :) Between your rose and my thorns we have quite a drama going lol Man thinks this.

zarul

17 years 7 months ago

Hi barbara

LOVE THIS ACROSTIC. perfect flow. gotta to give me some tips on how to produce an acrostic as beautiful as this one Send it by PM. ZARUL HUG

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Thanks Zarul

Appreciate your comment. These acrostics are practice poems for me learning to get it right. With all the critique given here. I am getting better with Gods blessings. Respectfully Yours, Barbara

zarul

17 years 7 months ago

Hi barbara

LOVE THIS ACROSTIC. perfect flow. gotta to give me some tips on how to produce an acrostic as beautiful as this one Send it by PM. ZARUL HUG

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Mark

Thanks, i changed it a little hope it flow better smoother now. i was writing a single rose situation i made it roses instead. may change later to give it the image i see in my head later. for now is this better. Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Barbara,

it's interesting that you write this when at the moment your avatar is a rose that is partially opened. your love for this person shows straight through, because the appreciation you have that of all the rose he pick you. This is a really will written Acrostic. In a few words you have conveyed a great deal of the person you love and yourself. Most excellent! don't change it, because there is only one rose for his table not many roses. your point is made at the end: "The one you choose A dozen roses wind Blown vases candle Light dinners Emotions run deep" thanks, Eddie "what is a rose if no one picks it, just a rose among many"

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Thanks Eddie

i appreciate all that you just said. you got it dead on Respectfully Yours, Barbara

leonard daranjo

17 years 7 months ago

Another fine Acrostic and romantic too

You are in the process of mastering the Acrostic Technique. Good writing. Take care Leonard

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Thanks Leonard

Happy to hear that, thanks for all your helpful responses. A rose for you. Respectfully Yours, Barbara

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

Wow

That's quite an acrostic there! I bow to your superiority! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"When I was strong, strong in the sound thought I'd see when day was done. Now I'm weaker than the palest blue Oh so weak in this need for you" - Nick Drake

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Jess

thanks appreciate you reading and commenting. Respectfully Yours, Barbara