Linda Moses

Nov 08, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Crying Eyes

Aching heart
And crying eyes

Breath that comes
In mournful sighs

Thoughts like lonely winds
Ever blowing through my mind

My sun is gone
Shadows all around

Tears now flow
From eyes so blind

A love now gone
No longer mine

I mourn the loss
Of you and me

— Linda Moses, Nov 08, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: rethinking this. have recently started reading the works of some of the greats, I will comment later

Critiques

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Crying Eyes

Sad but lovely poem Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Linda Moses

17 years 7 months ago

Thank you

Barbara, I have been working on an ending for this for a while now.

Linda Moses

17 years 7 months ago

Dawn

Thank you for your comments. I did read your poem about Joe, and I am so sorry

poewriter58

17 years 7 months ago

First two doublets are

First two doublets are fine third one "every" did you mean ever My sunshine gone what if you just said my sun is gone might have a little more strength no longer meant to be seems to have broken the momentum you had going I mourn the loss of you and me good idea but seems to fall flat Chrys

Linda Moses

17 years 7 months ago

Chrys

Yes is should have been ever. I'll have to think about the last 2 doublets for a different ending.This piece has given me trouble from the beginning. Thought I'd get it out and try it.

Mohammad Yamin Iraqi

17 years 7 months ago

Crying Eyes

This is a good poem - very touching and heartwrenching. The pointed weakness aside, I like it. The weakness can be improved in good time. No hurry. Best wishes. Mohammad

Linda Moses

17 years 7 months ago

Mohammand

thank you for reading. I do not know why such a small poem has given me so much trouble to write.

prayersbyPatty

17 years 7 months ago

Linda

Hey my friend, I loved this poem and the poem seems to reflect the downfall of it all. I understand. Someone took my sunshine also, time helps. Aching heart And crying eyes Breath that comes In mournful sighs Thoughts like lonely winds Ever blowing through my mind Beautiful, breathtaking, and since you can't have shadows without sun. How about Sunshine disappears around my world or Your sunshine disappeared around my world. The last two lines are fine they fall flat like the relationship. This poem in a pearl in an oyster. Beautiful..... Patty

Linda Moses

17 years 7 months ago

Thank you

Patty for your encouraging comments. Thank your for your help, I'm still undecided

prayersbyPatty

17 years 6 months ago

Linda

Your poem really touched my heart, I could feel your pain. probably cause I went through it too. I can tell you did a lot of work on this one. Nicely written. Patty

Rett

17 years 6 months ago

I don't know how I missed this Linda

I love the flow on this one. It is a tear jerker that really tugged at the heart stings. Beautifully written and flowed like honey. Well done. Respectfully, Rett: "Did you ever notice that the politicians who want to ban gun ownership are the very ones that should be shot anyway?" Rett: 2008

Linda Moses

17 years 6 months ago

Rett

Thank you for reading and for your kind comments.