Dream Tripping

good write,good rhythm, and flow Respectfully Yours, Barbara

This is an interesting piece here, Moon I enjoyed it~

Excellent re-write Moon~ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ~~~~~~~~Janice Pearce~~~~~~~~

Nice potentially alter-ego write! Dark and cynical. At first I thought you were talking about my ex..... LMAO! Nice job, friend. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"When I was strong, strong in the sound thought I'd see when day was done. Now I'm weaker than the palest blue Oh so weak in this need for you" - Nick Drake

Hi Richard, This is pretty deep. I think you're not getting out of bed because you're afraid of the dark thoughts revealed in the dream. Is this true? Anyway, it is thought provoking, and I like it. Donna

no other better response than 'WHOA'. i think this is ur best work ever. this is the poem that i liked the most from u.

to me... lyrical... very nice, Stephanie

Sleek is my description of this poem of yours. Enjoyed Patty

To me, the repetition of that last line, gives the whole poem an extra twist. Caused me to read it over and over, until all the pieces of the puzzle created an inner image. And the image and atmospher that I recieved, is one of the human psyche. The idea of moving outside patterns and rules, breaking free from collective behaviour, leaving rationalism behind. But there is something or a few things that stop most of us, that force us to remain passive in the physical world, and lock such thoughs into a specified area in the consciousness. Feelings, empathy, maybe a bit of common sense. Anyhow, I really enjoyed this poem, and I agree that it seems complete as it is. //Nihilia

an echoe of frost, done deadlier "and miles to go before i sleep" and all that but far more chilling as an entity, you can feel the breath in the edge of panic very nice very nie N

I can identify with the speaker. "and I would never hold your hand" - such a simple line. but it has such an impact the way you have placed it. this poem gave me goosebumps.

as I do love punk gothic from england there is a band called Siouxsie and the Banshees and Joy Division that are my theme music in life Banshees have a song about a "candyman" or drug dealer of course sung in such a sweet lyrical way their dark perky tunes echo filled with Susan Dallions voice perfect Mr Moonman I have of course agree to others as I do to you that I am now a fan of yours this poem knocks me on my damned ass just from the periphery like getting T-boned at that favourite intersection knocked me down I LOVE this poem!!!!!!!!!! and will search on my early six oclock utter blackness alone reading neopoet time morning before coffee great great poem Richard!!! thank you