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Like a God

This poem is for Mark and the love of flight!
          Because you wanted to know.
this was my first free fall jump, near Lawton
Oklahoma. I had jumped before but free-fall
                        was the best!!

Traveling through the expanse of a blue sky,
           seeing powder puffs of clouds,
you step to the door and feel a head wind of
                     100mph or more,
your heart starts beating at a rate you've never
                            felt before,
while you wait for a shoulder tap, that  means
              you must step out the door,
the tap is given and without a pause you step
                      right out the door,
Like a hand the wind pushes you far away from
                             the door,
now there only you and the rushing air, gravity
           pulls you down to the ground,
you feel the the ground moving towards you,
there is no sensation of falling it's more like
                              floating,
that's when you feel that little fear, like if your
standing still and can not move, you feel like
the ground is rushing at you, as if it was a bull
             that will crash right into you,
for a second while your chute unfolds your vision
          blurs and your heart just stops,
suddenly there's a pull like a hangman's noose,
then your heart gets a jolt, your blood slams into
                             your head,
     then a relief passes through out your soul,
 now the flying truly begins, you begin to circle to
                              your LZ,
in your head you calculate how close you can get,
you see all of the horizon,  the ground looks like a
 great big map, rivers, bi-ways, roads, highways,
 trees that look like bushes, fields, towns, farms,
                      and church steeples,
all these things are permanently imprinted in your
                                    head,
   It's like being a god and looking down on it all,
funny, but your always glad when you touch the
      ground, then you realize how small and
                  insignificant you really are.





— Eduardo Cruz, Nov 04, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

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themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Eddie...

jumping out of a plane is something I always wanted to try in my younger more daring days... were you in the paratroopers? My father was career military... I never joined... and luckily missed the draft by one year for Viet Nam... actually less than a year... I thank you for sharing your "free-fall" with us... must be an exhilarating experience... Richard
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Hey Richard

will always be! besides my SF training, which I'll never forget. exhilarating does not cover the feel, I tried to convey the feeling in this write but I seem not to find the words. Thanks for the comment, Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose de Diego
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Julie,

that was all I was trying to do, get the reader to feel it. Thank you! Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose De Diego
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barbsdad2003

17 years 7 months ago

Nice job

I jumped once. I remember feeling terrified that I might fall before the jumpmaster rapped my knee to signal my letting go. Standing there, leaning forward to grasp the wing's trailing edge, the wind blowing so fiercely, with such a thin ledge separating my shaky foot from outer space. Letting go ... such a careless thing to go. Like giving up. Like experiencing a microsecond of unconsciousness. Like trusting myself. And the person who packed the parachute. That person so unknown to me. A stranger. Like jumping from a cliff. Moments later I felt the tug, then rocked, then recognized, too belatedly, that the goddamned chute had truly opened, that my chances of getting through it alive had just been upgraded. Relief. Then peace. A time granted to experience the view, the surreal silence, the nervous flutter sound of the chute aripple somewhere above my head. Then, finally, the crash into ground impossibly hard, a panicked few minutes transpiring (literally minutes, yes; no hyperbole here) waiting to see if feeling returned to my body below the belt. Not knowing if it would. A couple of guys running in my direction. A shout, "Are you OK?" I didn't answer, then said, "I don't know." So anxious I was. Then, gradually ... Given my own flight from plane, I can tell, in my reading of your piece here, that your experience was genuine. It happened. I guess, in a way, that makes us brothers. Thanx, Chuck
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 6 months ago

my brother,

Your jump was to scary for me, I have no fear of death that's why I did it for years. It was my fear of life that made me do crazy things. Now that I'm much older, I am glad I experience it. Could I do it now, I don't know? I still don't feel fear of death, but now I don't fear life an I want to live longer! thanks for your comment Chuck. Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose De Diego
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

Eddie

Jon got me to do a static-line jump years ago. At least I didn't have the fear of being so consumed in either fear or awe that I would forget to pop my chute! It was done for me! New Jersey seemed like it was a speck below me, and I got a couple quick updrafts, which made my glide in a little longer - could enjoy the view more. I don't think I'd be able to handle a free-fall, though..... ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- "Before you criticize someone, you should walk a mile in their shoes. That way when you criticize them, you are a mile away from them and you have their shoes."
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 6 months ago

Jess,

the reason I did it over and over again in different places was because of the God like birds eye view, I think if theirs a God,that's why he is so powerful. I guess maybe thinking of it now that was more than likely it, the power of it was what kept making me do it. It sounds stupid, but I never said that I had a brain in my head. LOL thanks, Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose De Diego