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leonard daranjo
Nov 07, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

For the Control Freaks who think they know it all

They have been observing you

For much too long

And collectively control you

With a wave of a wand

 

If only you could take them

To the treshhold of you

Horizons would disappear

Far from view

 

Don’t be pigeonholed 

In the prison of their minds

Make them leave you alone

You shall be fine

 

Don't allow anyone  

To tell you what to do

Search the depth of your soul

There’s a message for you


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themoonman

themoonman

17 years 6 months ago

Leonard...

another good write with a very good message... Horizons will... maybe "would" would keep it in the same tense... this sounds like it was written for someone in particular... I do hope they get to read it... Richard
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leonard daranjo

17 years 6 months ago

Thank you Richard

You are right "would" is more appropriate. I have changed it. One more thing: You nailed it, it is was written for someone in particular. In fact I first wrote this piece in first person and later - in order to make its appeal more universal - I changed it to 2nd person. Thanks for your insightful comment. You have away of slicing through the core of what a person wants to say. This is one of the reasons why I appreciate your comments. Thanks once again ... Leonard
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 6 months ago

Control Freaks

Leonard, Another in depth write here, I enjoyed this one~ Wow on that last stanza!!
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leonard daranjo

17 years 6 months ago

Than you Janice

As always - always a pleasure hearing from you. Angering me? Never!!! Collaborating with you on this forum has been a great and beneficial experience. Take care ... Leonard
Mark

Mark

17 years 6 months ago

Leonard

Sound advice for someone who needs it. Those who are controlled are totally out of control it seems :) Man thinks this.
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Lonnie

17 years 6 months ago

Good Job, Man!

Powerful message backed up by forceful content! Really Cool!
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leonard daranjo

17 years 6 months ago

You are absolutely spot on

This is veered towards a certain person. Actually, I began writing this in first person that - to depersonalise it somewhat - I changed it to 2nd person. Thanks for stopping by ... Leonard
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 6 months ago

Leonard

Geezz I didn't mean to anger you! Sorry lol Take care Leonard~ _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 6 months ago

Leonard

Really good write i saw it was veered toward a certain person also is why my first response was brief. it is well written with a good flow. Respectfully Yours, Barbara
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leonard daranjo

17 years 6 months ago

Thanks again Barbara

There are many prickly issues of this sort in my life. There is another piece entitled "For All Those Who Have Poisoned My Life". That one also is veered to a few people whom I would rather forget. These issues have happened a long time back but they are like prickly thorns that keep pricking until you pry them out. The only way to get them out of your system is to write about them. Take care