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Good Boy !

 

I’ve been a real good boy mom

I’ve tidied up the yard

I’ve cut the lawn and weeded

I’ve been working awful hard


 

I’ve done my chores, and then some

I’ve done my homework too

I’ve polished all the floors

What more d' I have to do


 

I know that I’ve been naughty

I know that I’ve been bad

I didn’t mean to shoot him

Didn't mean to kill my Dad


 

Are ya gonna call the cops Mom

Are ya gonna call the law

Let me tell ya momma

y'aint walkin' out that door


 

I've been a real good boy Mom

I've finished every chore

Get up momma please

Stop bleedin' on the floor

— shazbat, Nov 04, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Norfolk, UK, GBR

Favorite Poets: Kipling, T.S Eliot, Hilaire Belloc, Ogden Nash, Spike Milligan and many more.

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Critiques

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Mohammad Yamin Iraqi

17 years 7 months ago

Good Boy

This is a sensational poem. What a tragic end! This is sad but happens in today's society. What is the cause? Are we distancing ourselves from moality or there is a deficiency in the upbringing of our offsprings? Why are the children turning into bums and cold-blooded and heartless devils? It is time we think if we don't want to produce a destructive generation. -Mohammad
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Jasmine

17 years 7 months ago

Way dark poem...

The rhythm of this poem is amazing...and even though it is quite dark..it did make me wonder if the law finally got him...think a part II would be fantastic.. Jaz
shazbat

shazbat

17 years 7 months ago

Thanks you guys for your

Thanks you guys for your kind comments, so glad you all enjoyed it. as for part 2 I'm not so sure thats going to happen. John
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Good Boy !

amazing good poem enjoyed the drama and smooth flow this has. Respectfully Yours, Barbara
shazbat

shazbat

17 years 7 months ago

Well Barbara, you are too

Well Barbara, you are too kind, it really means a lot to recieve positive feedback, thanks again. John
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

John...

your darker side is showing... loved this look into the psyche of your "killer". This could be part two, part one could be "Dad"... just a thought I had... enjoyed the read John... Richard
shazbat

shazbat

17 years 7 months ago

Richard, I’ll certainly

Richard, I'll certainly think about a prequel but dont hold your breath, I'ts all a bit hectic at the moment, I'm working 14 hours most days, elderly parents to look after, 2 dogs to walk and I've just started a part time university course, then at weekends its good to get out on the motorcycle to blow the cobwebs away. John