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My Country Tis

"My country tis of thee",
was pounding in her head...
she knew all the *seems*
were constanty fraying
on the edge of the edge...

how could she not? page
after page of history
wrapped tight around
her form and substance,
crescendos of afterthought
are weapons denied
are still weapons applied

America is a drowning pool
gagged and going blind

home is still where the heart is.

My country tis of thee.





— Kailashana, Nov 01, 2008

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theladyblue

theladyblue

17 years 7 months ago

Beautiful!

and more right than most of us know...My country tis of thee too lol great write neighbor! oh and your *seems* are seamless! <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..."
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Anna,

you are a true patriot even in this darkness. you write so beautiful, always invoking great imagery! I'm glad you didn't quit! Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose de Diego
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Anna...

there you go again... giving me those tingles... are weapons denied are still weapons applied this part kind of lost me.. I think what you meant here are not weapons denied still weapons applied but I could be wrong... please correct me my learned friend because it is not unlike me to read it all wrong... Richard
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Mohammad Yamin Iraqi

17 years 7 months ago

Kailashana

This is a beautiful write. It demonstrates your allegiance to your country. Very carefully chosen words and excellent imagery. Best of luck in your writings. -Mohammad
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

Thank you my dear friends,

Thank you my dear friends, my parents came here to offer their children a better life... we were rebellious flower children... they had their doubts ;-) My x husband came here for the same reason as a teenager. So our children are first generation born in Americans. Neither of them have ever complained about where they were born though they complain about many other things of their parents. That's about it... And still i choose to see what needs fixing.... our government has been broken for a long time and has not SERVED its people. Moonman my love, my poems are subject to the reader's interpretations. Sometimes poems flow through me without a word of change... this is one of them. So upon reading it, i saw a few interpretations. That's how i like 'em. After all, life is, America is, we are and ALL of it is subject to our interpretations. The majority of folks have been too silent for too long. Neither the extreme right or left are going to a place where we will be *healed* and most of us are hurting one way or another. ~A
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Thank you Anna...

we post our poems and they become their own life in the eyes of the reader... acceptance is our course in this life... thank you for addressing my question... I feel very close to you... as I tend to agree with your outspoken ideals... and I thank you for being here now... at the same time as I Richard