SCATTERED WORDS

SCATTERED WORDS Disorderliness stalked Every path I walked I scattered things here and there Then looked for them everywhere In frustration, I threw seven cowries For a clue on what was wrong Two faced up and five down The eyes were blind to the signs The leopard couldn’t change its spots I searched for meanings in the words And placed them on the screen Yet, scattered, they looked, With neither rhyme nor rhythm, so I opted for free verses and run-on lines

— t. reflexion, Nov 01, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript , It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics

Critiques

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

T...

Scattered Words... great title... the first word in the poem stumbles coming out of my mouth every time... yet it carries such a vivid image I don't have a suggestion as to how to change it... or even if it should be... perhaps it is just my old country English that stumbles... And then I found the word "cowries" ... had to look it up, ignorant to it I was... obviously been a part of the world for a long time... and it made your poem and it's meanings jump out at me... thank you for the beautiful enrichment... Richard

t. reflexion

17 years 7 months ago

Richard

Thank you for appreciating this piece which presents 'Scattered Words' as a natural way for some people to speak or do things. The seeming disorderly manner begs for the search to find the cause and the cure and makes one wonder if nothing serious can ever come out. The good thing though, is that this type of behaviour, produces free verses which has become a style. Best wishes. T.

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

T.

for scattered words, this is a great job of explaining them. I enjoyed this very much! thanks, Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose de Deigo

t. reflexion

17 years 7 months ago

Eddie

Thank you for the reading and for liking this piece. It tries to explain the difficulty of writing poems that are restricted by rules, like pentameter, rhythm and rhyme. It uses a particular lifestyle as a window into the mind of the poet who writes run-on lines. Best wishes. T.