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Battleground


The hurt -All encompassing and consuming.The pain -Sharp, with deadly accuracy.The fear -So deep into the core of the soul.The stress –Simply mind bending.The rage –With animalistic aggression.The anger –Always bitter and blinding.The sentence –Fragmented and senseless.The words –But a blur in the mind.The fight –Near the white flag.The hope –Shattered.    The reality –Sucks. The corner –Turned. She pushed aside the hurt.She brushed away the pain.She stood up to the fear.She quieted the stress.She squashed the rage.She eased the anger.She restructured the sentence.She found the words.She fought the fight.She regained the hope.Her reality became livable. She turned the corner –Again.

Written by Tink 10/28/02 5:45am
— Tink, Oct 28, 2008

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Region, Country: Pennsylvania, USA

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Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

Amazing labyrinth of a

Amazing labyrinth of a poem.. much like a punctured balloon.... you just know something *happened* inside. Bow. ~A
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Hi Tink...

the structure threw me for a minute... but I finished the read and liked it very much... well done! Richard
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Tessadiana

17 years 7 months ago

hey

really did love it Tessadiana<3
Mark

Mark

17 years 7 months ago

speachless tink

I could mention my cousin a beautiful young woman who is no longer with us. Joy and Peace, Mark Man thinks this.
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Tink

17 years 7 months ago

thanks to all for commenting

thanks to all for commenting - i wrote this for my dearest friend who is battling brain cancer. please keep commenting!!!!
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

tink

such a sad write. well done. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"The fortunes of fables are able To see the dawn Now witness the quickness with which We get along To sing the blues you've got to live the dues and Carry on." - CSN&Y
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muttering_madwoman

17 years 7 months ago

gorgeous, tink

and thanks for the amazing tribute. all should know that i have recieved hundreds of comments from those of us battling cancer in thanks for this piece, expressing perfection of the voice and feel and life. it will be published in non profits as a source of feel and hope to thousands its perfection, and i love you. N
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Jasmine

17 years 7 months ago

Amazing

An excellent writing...love the structure....makes you feel the pain...and the anger...and yet the hope... Jaz
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poewriter58

17 years 7 months ago

Tink

Well done except for one small problem she , she , she , she my suggestion eliminate all but the first as we know that you mean "she" Chrys