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The Drowning Pool

Silver cool of letheful water, slows all air-sucked thought with the measured metronome of sweeping, carving limbs. The echo of each dipping arm a vibrating metallic strip whose muffled resonance mind-weaves with eerie rhythm, the rush of steady silence, which punctuates each memory’s clamoured discord.   Here remembered syllables are blurred, the distorted utterance of words lost in disembodied diphthong, except those formed inside my head, mouthed without utterance.   Flashed, shimmering sunlight jewels criss-cross the smooth white glaze which slides beneath my body’s wake, and all those suppressed distractions flood into detached consciousness. A world of sense-transmuted flesh and full-immersed with dragging, floating-lilied touch whose light diffused by muted sound   is one free-flowing, synaesthetic stream.   Truth found in a myriad of bubbles plucked from the surface air. Soul wrapped in the warm-bathed spirit of amniotic birth, drifting without need or purpose towards another twisted turn where lies, and self-deception, show minds have no such boundaries, their drowning-pools won’t let you live to puke a second chance of air this side of sanity.
 
— professor, Oct 25, 2008

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Region, Country: China/Sichuan/Chengdu, CHN

Favorite Poets: Yeats, Elliot, Auden, Keats, Shelley, Byron

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themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Keith...

brave... no.. to be honest, I had difficulty understanding this one... I've read a couple of times and was waiting for someone smarter than me to comment on the meaning... sorry, your poem wasn't being ignored... in fact I clicked on "most popular" the other day and it was near the top all day, so I know it was being read by someone... I thought at first it was about drowning(loved the title) but I think it is about one losing their mind... but I tell you, I could be wrong... I lost mine some time ago... Richard
professor

professor

17 years 7 months ago

Hi Richard

Its not so complex really although it is open to many different interpretations. On the surface it is simply the feelings of calm, out of body experience as one swims almost mindless in the pool but then it begins to sap the life from you as you drown in its lethe and limited boundaries. If you are lucky you drag yourself out puking on the side to challenge its limits, if not the drowning pulls you down into mindless, if comfortable, insanity. Not a cheerfull theme thats for sure but one that perhaps many can relate in some way to. Thanks for being brave. Keith
Tonya

Tonya

17 years ago

‘Silver cool of letheful water,

(I kind of liked the idea of lethal there, I have a slight phobia of water…but, I suppose that does not fit with the ideology presented) ‘silver cool of forgetful water… like swimming on your back in the ocean, all sound is muted, slow strokes. The sounds you do hear, muffled like background noise to the thoughts in our brains. There is a detached consciousness with the deficit of one of the senses impaired so. Your poem gives a lightness/ weightless feeling. I find, though, I do not particularly like the ending. After the calm, peaceful, self-reflection of the above, the ending throws me off balance. Its harsh, leading me to believe our sense of security is false, our purpose false… Perhaps that is your meaning, if we are not careful. Always a pleasure to read your work. Slowly, I am getting there. I can find no place I would change, other than you give my security back in the end. lol. Always, Tonya
professor

professor

17 years ago

Thankyou Tonya

for taking the trouble to go back and look at some of my earlier postings. The deep water can certainly be lethal but here it is mesmeric and conducive of deep forgetfulness. The ending you are not supposed to like and it comes as a shock after the lulling rhythm of apparently mindless swimming. But the pool has more significance than in merely being swum.It is where we can all too easily drown our lives in comfortable meaninglessness and limiting boundaries and from which there is sometimes only a single chance of escape. Glad you enjoyed it. My best wishes Keith
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 10 months ago

I didn't see the drowning in water bUT IN MY MIXED UP MIND

I pitcured a conductor swingig a sick orcastrting a flooding dance of liquid sound I don't know why And then the music is sallowed and regurated to escape the flooding rein upon this listener. Well I am tired will reread some other time I enjoyed it very much, =It did bog my mind a little I guess this is when my amagination began to inter mingle with your words sorry for all the tyepo's of late I am barrowing a friends lap top I think she has split something on the keys they are not working all that great. Donnie/Sinbad
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 10 months ago

I didn't see the drowning in water bUT IN MY MIXED UP MIND

I pitcured a conductor swingig a sick orcastrting a flooding dance of liquid sound I don't know why And then the music is sallowed and regurated to escape the flooding rein upon this listener. Well I am tired will reread some other time I enjoyed it very much, =It did bog my mind a little I guess this is when my amagination began to inter mingle with your words sorry for all the tyepo's of late I am barrowing a friends lap top I think she has split something on the keys they are not working all that great. Donnie/Sinbad