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Kailashana
Kailashana
Oct 23, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Waves and Strings ~ Pantoum

in waves and strings they bring
being and sound sublime
a visual practice of seeing
falls through a depression of seeming

being and sound sublime
alternate anticipation and hesitation
falls through a depression of seeming
no one enters and no one leaves

alternate anticipation and hesitation
reach harmonic accord
no one enters and no one leaves
the doors of perception open and close

reach harmonic accord
when truth soothes a troubled world
the doors of perception open and close
enrapturing the heart in bliss

when truth soothes a troubled world
no song is unheard
enrapturing the heart in bliss
a butterfly takes to wing.



— Kailashana, Oct 23, 2008

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barbsdad2003

17 years 7 months ago

Now that I've ...

Google-checked for an explanation of pantoum, I'm for sure convinced I'm not brave enough to attempt it on my own. At least not without much handholding. And that with sympathetic hand. Whatever this's called, you've captured the sense, the mood, if you will, and, yes, even the serenity of waves and strings. And that quite beautifully. For my pleasure, it seems, Chuck
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

I am with Chuck...

loved your poem Anna... I can't imagine why you would be banned from a poetry site... shame on them! but good for us! Richard
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

Ahh my brave girl!!

This is the second one that I've read in this format, and I have one thing to say... Totally out of my league! I'll leave the cool formats to the cool people. LOL! Well done. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"So you stand on the corner in your new English clothes, and you look so polished from your hair down to your toes. Ah, but still your finger's gonna pick your nose after all." - Billy Joel
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 7 months ago

Anna

This poem wove a spell of bliss on me. Patty
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Lonnie

17 years 7 months ago

Nicely Done!

Great poem, Kailashana! I'm not too familiar with the style, although I have written one or two, but I know what I like when I see it! Lonnie
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Arrow

17 years 7 months ago

I had to read this poem several times

before I got it. In fact, it was only after I read the end that the beginning made sense so, for me, it really was a circular poem, even though the last line was not the first (poor, struggling linear brain). Neat thing about that last line - like floating off light as air after the heaviness of repetition. Enjoyable.