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That Sweet Sweet Smell

Welcome to your nightmare,
aren't you glad you're not alone.
There are many doors that lead you here,
but none will take you home.

I am the Spider waiting patiently,
the Stalker with some time...
I'll wait right here
until I smell your fear
and then you'll be all mine.

I am the Beast in your sweet fairy tales,
the dark cloud in your dreams,
I am the doctor eating patients here,
they come in but never leave.

Pleasures, Pains,
they are quite the same,
but of course, you won't know that...
but you'll observe and learn
and when it comes your turn
your cries won't be an act.

When your head gets cleared
from the pleasures here,
or... you are getting used to pain...
I'll just move you on to better things,
until I smell your fear again.
— themoonman, Oct 21, 2008

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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orgami

17 years 7 months ago

top hat and cane

Yes I can see you with Oval glasses and silk topper skull cane the coach with its dark horses and lamps Happy Halloween great write Richard!
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

O...

of course my cane doubles as a sword don't ya know!... thanks for reading and leaving those images with me...lol Richard
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Hi Linda...

didn't mean to scare you... well, maybe I did...lol I guess it is too much Dexter... have you seen that show? it seems like every other show now is about some serial killer. Richard
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Wanted...

Hi, glad to have you here on the site.. I appreciate your reading this and commenting and I am mighty glad you liked it... I think it still needs a little something but I'm not sure yet what it is... Voting... the stars on the left are the average of votes already counted, individuals vote with the stars on the right hand side.... Welcome to the site, hope you enjoy it here... Richard
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

Dude!

That was awesomely freaky! Doctor eating patients here, they get in but don't get out. (paraphrased) - What a shivering line. Great Halloween poem! I'm going to go cower with Linda now. Where was this when we did the gross poem contest? LOL! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"They gave you life, and in return you gave 'em hell. As cold as ice, I hope we live to tell the tale..." - Tears For Fears
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Hi Jess...

my darker side is hiding so it is safe to come out and play...lol appreciate the read of this one my friend... the gross poem contest... did not think of it.. oh well... thanks Richard
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vonnegutfan

17 years 7 months ago

love It

Really great poem. Dark and beautiful. Thanks for sharing
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

vonnegutfan...

so glad you stopped in and took the time to read and comment... thank you! Richard
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muttering_madwoman

17 years 7 months ago

yes!

now that is just a helluva fun read, richard--kudos! N
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Fun...??????

it is supposed to scare the hell out of ya.... lol... it was a fun write... thanks friend... Richard
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muttering_madwoman

17 years 7 months ago

lol

then better bare them teeth again, and sharpen the blades.... please do scare the hell outta me, i dare ya! great to be back, thanks for the warm return
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rainbow

17 years 6 months ago

That Sweet Smell.

I think this had a really good flow, It held right to the end. good rhyme theme, an enjoyable read. Peace Rain-
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 9 months ago

Oh yes

This is more like it...an evil piece of writing...right up my street. I like this very much and I like the alternative style last two verses, this is like 3 verses and then the last two could be a sort of chorus which brings it altogether. This is full of imagery...even if these images are tainted by the shadows you've created. I read this one many times...please post more of this sort. Great write. regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 9 months ago

H.S.

thanks for reading and I'm glad you liked my little walk in the dark... I do have some more, I usually don't write this type of poetry but once in a while it just comes out. thanks Richard
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Richard

This is deliciously dark I loved it ... love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

Richard

A fantastically dark write... right up my alley. Loved it! Happy Halloween back at you. Always, Cat