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The Midnight hour of all Souls Eve

Flaming eyes like fatal lighting bolts
A mouth that will swallow your very soul,

Along with him he brings gloom and doom
of the three none is bolder then he,

He has no heart to speak of,
all there is, is spine chilling icy cold,

In the deepest darkest places of your heart
and soul, he looms,

There he hides, always searching for souls,
be careful he's coming for yours soon!!

In The quick death he finds no joy, but prolonging
it is like a child's toy,

Fear, loss, pain, and regret are his children,
the ones he loves, his little boys,

When someone comes with fatal news,
right away fear takes hold,

then your hit with an earth shattering loss,
you can feel it down to your very soul,

Struck by pain, your world comes to a
screeching halt,

Why you ask, why could I not help the soul I have
always loved,

Regret comes and takes control of your mind and
soul,

The onslaught brought by these four threats has
opened the door for gloom and doom,

the flash of lighting with in his eyes signal of his
hope that you might take your own life,

Suddenly from somewhere deep in you, reason
takes charge like a loving wife,

Death let's out a spine chilling whale,
reason has saved another life,

Be sure when the darkest of your Midnight hours
comes, on all Souls Eve,

That you have packed your Reason, as you take
your leave!!


 

— Eduardo Cruz, Oct 21, 2008

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Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

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infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

Wow

Geez Eddie, you dug down good and deep for this one. Had those nice little icy shivers goin'. Nice work! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"They gave you life, and in return you gave 'em hell. As cold as ice, I hope we live to tell the tale..." - Tears For Fears
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Jess,

that line from the song is very appropriate for this poem I wish I would have thought of it. thanks Eddie PS. I hope your feeling better!! "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose de Deigo
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

quite

Just an angry belly. It's okey dokey now. The song line is from "Shout" by Tears For Fears... I have a weakness for 70's and 80's music, what can I say? LOL! X~D I can only stay for a little while on tomorrow's chat - leaving for PA at around 4:30am, so can't be up late. btw: remember when you said you wanted to see me in a dress? Take a gander at the photo posted.... LOL! I have a better one, but trying to resize it from 2.3mb! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"They gave you life, and in return you gave 'em hell. As cold as ice, I hope we live to tell the tale..." - Tears For Fears
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Wanted,

your Avatar looks like a creature out of 'Hell" thanks for stopping by, Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose de Deigo
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 7 months ago

Who is "he"?

If its the devil isn't it a bit out of place in a trick or treat child's festival, yeah? Would have expected you to be more mature. (not really, you have proved otherwise by personal slurs) The dichotomy of fancy dress and the devil takes away from the impact. Perhaps you need to look at what you are really trying to say. Childhood trauma perhaps? Razor blades in the candy? The faux dramatic tone belies the subject matter. cheers, Jess (I am not playing, this is serious crit. You don't play well so now you get me as a serious, informed reviewer.)
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Jess,

how is it you could not recognize yourself. Let me be the first to explain to you the difference between "All Hollows Eve" and "all Souls Eve". This is the day of the dead in Latin countries, the day the dead rise in search of their bodies. the people spend that day praying. and at Midnight they dress like the dead to drive them back to their graves, it is not a celebration, like they do in most parts of the world, or like "The Druids" that worshipped the dead. It is a day of solemn remembrance of the dead. Sometimes the statements you make just make me laugh. If I was as bored as you I'd walk right off the edge and end it all, Oh I'm sorry you just like to alienate. I Love the way you look at my poetry with your child like, perverted view. Don't stop, I aways look forward to hear what will come out of that twisted brain of yours. LOL!! If that's you serious, then I'm Walter Winchell. thanks for your comment, and all you do to make me try harder! Eddie "here he has no enemy, only the winter and rough weather" Jane Austin
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 7 months ago

Oh dear,

Yes I screw up and betray my lack of knowledge (I wiki'd it and that's the result I got). But I never resort to adolescent name calling. The difference between lack of knowledge and ignorance is clear in the etymology. Ignorance is ignoring truth. Not that I would lower myself to calling names, your only argument, which is not one. Settle down boyo, I have fun with people who I disagree with vehemently, http://www.neopoet.com/node/13677 http://www.neopoet.com/node/14162 http://www.neopoet.com/node/14093 and many more. You just abuse, not very intelligently. cheers, Jess
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poewriter58

17 years 7 months ago

Eddie

third set of doublets second line is a bit to wordy. 6th doublet is outstanding. Wonderfully bone chilling. A fine bit of writing Chrys
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Chrys,

keep in mind that I am a novice, please be a little bit clearer and I will happily fix it. 8 months and you years. I'm just a student. I appreciate that you point out these things to me. I am definitely learning thanks always, Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose de Deigo
Mark

Mark

17 years 7 months ago

Horror Fantacy

I liked it and thought maybe give him some name to form him. I felt an impact here, Eddie an experience. Well done! Mark Man thinks this.
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Mark,

this is fantasy, I could not think of a name so I left it to the reader to call the name out from their own fears. Jess picked the Devil. Not my first or second thought. But you now, are the man at this abstract thinking and wonderful Scifi thoughts. I'm sure you have an interesting name. I'd like to hear it. thanks Eddie "if I get drunk on holloween, does that make me a monster?"
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

Take your leave oh raison

Take your leave oh raison d'etre! take the heart of every girl and boy! do not leave even one cherished thought behind oh you devilish evil mother f..... of mayhem! ~A
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Anna,

this is definitely not for Children, but on the other hand there is a child in all of us. I really like that quote, thanks for your comment, Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose de Deigo
Mark

Mark

17 years 7 months ago

hmmm ok will try

Sammael (angel of poison or the poisonous one)can't work I know lol gave it a shot anyhow. Thanks I have not been in those books for quite a while. Respectfully, Mark Man thinks this.
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

Hi Eddie

I think I was previously married to this guy! LOL. Just a spelling mistake or two, but over all great write. I enjoyed the dark read. Keep it up. Always, Cat