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Nature Mithya
Oct 14, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Mercedes

You


— Nature Mithya, Oct 14, 2008

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purplemoondoll

17 years 7 months ago

At you touch my heart goes

At you touch my heart goes crazy? Dod you mean at your touch?'. Might be worth checking this through again in case there are other typos. Great imagination - especially these lines:- Time spins the wheels as love thread. Held together defining the purrs, Roar. Cradled by you lusting to music calls In you tenderness, your caress moves You build the 'love affair' really well and made me smile. :-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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Nature Mithya

17 years 7 months ago

Sorry

Kindly read the comments below Please. I thought I was commenting on your comments.
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Nice Poem

I have a problem with you--your too it drives me crazy every time I leave the last letter off of a word. Doing that a lot lately. Will flow smoother, I think if you didn't use the punctuation. Will come back for a reread. Respectfully Yours, Barbara
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Nature Mithya

17 years 7 months ago

Sorry, I do understand how irratating this mistake get s one...

...into when reading. Ok I will tell you the facts and edit afterwords. There was a person by the name of Mercedes she liked me always fighting in haku poetry insisting she was great.I would copy her style for I actually know no haku. So I write this poem and ask her 'well what do you think' and she says lovely beautiful what a fine car. But as soon as I tell her it is you I write about we have a real unending fight. Lol What fun to tease someone and to think they believe in it too. True it is lovely to be naughty.