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Kailashana
Kailashana
Oct 12, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Familiar

Here you are again my friend,
naked and uncompromising
the mirror steams of breath
so i pass for living flesh,
the pain body reasserts itself
feeds upon the marrow of my bones
immersed,
not yet drowning
i am
incredibly proficient in my dramatic display
of misery...

i need a knight of serendipity to slay the dragons
of despair to find me all alone
in a magical mystical rainforest of sighs
unearthed

but i dream now.

i dream now i remember a million lifetimes
ending with this moment of rebirth

and the world cares not for any single
incarnation

it just goes on.

i struggle for no apparent reason

these mental demons are stronger
than my body's bliss.

my heart is full of what if's....

and the sun is always shining
across Elysian Fields,

wheatfields bow as i pass.








— Kailashana, Oct 12, 2008

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ivanovich316

17 years 8 months ago

Very poignant

Self-examination, always a sensitive subject. You have done it very well. The first stanza draws an in depth picture of that side of you (the speaker) that uses pain to advantage. The wishing for a "Knight" to slay the dragon and set you free is certainly a logical as well as emotionally desirable solution. Then there is a lot of questioning, the world doesn't care, why do I struggle, these demons are overwhelming. You have really reached deep into not only your own abyss, but one that is, at least to some degree, common to all. I like the ray of hope, some serenity and peace in the last three lines. Excellent poem. John Line 5 reads a little ambiguously, at least for me. Possibly there is a more effective way to word "pain body". The concept is really strong, communicating it, not so easy.
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 8 months ago

i suppose the pain body is a

i suppose the pain body is a sheath we discard... and if we're lucky we discard it, as alluded to in the last 5 lines.... the incarnations into this moment are priceless... to be savored no matter how *painful*. i try to remember that, not successfully as i go through the bardo. ~A
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rider68

17 years 8 months ago

Hi Anna

Your woven words bleed of pain, Sorry that you are troubled yet how cruel - is when such hurting produces such fine writing, although painful yet fantastic, may your heart stay magical to your pen..... In love and deep respects...... Peter ~~~"I am not afraid of tomorrow, for I have seen yesterday, and I love today."~~~
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 8 months ago

…as is your *25 years*

...as is your *25 years* dearest Peter. i suppose some of it has to do with attending a speaking tour of *survivors of cluster bombs*... including a photo journal... i'll post what i wrote for a group later in this thread. a friend is picking me up to go to Kent for a concert of Persian music. i am blessed in so many ways... the existential aloneness i have faced and hence my greatest journey, the aloneness without a Beloved at my side is even more difficult. ....so somehow our 2 poems intersect Peter.... we've known each other for awhile now, eh? ~A
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rider68

17 years 8 months ago

HI A~

So as to not miss your posting i am linking to you, Have a great evening enjoy the concert.......I'm off seeing David grey @ O2 this coming tuesday, Bliss....... Peter ~~~"I am not afraid of tomorrow, for I have seen yesterday, and I love today."~~~
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orgami

17 years 8 months ago

"Incredibly proficient in my dramatic display of misery.."

greatest line in this poem yes the Why the reason of all quests Dragons many I have met young and old Mirror Mirror narcism our modern luxurys turning gold to sand turning sand to mirrors great poem
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 8 months ago

Anna,

the examining of ones self is hard, because we are bias. and see our imperfection that sometimes people see as our strengths. The gauge of self examination is the direction of our life's, which doesn't always seem to be what we wanted, because as imperfect human we always want more! that's what I see in this write. Maybe it"s just me. thanks, Eddie
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 7 months ago

Anna

I liked this poem, to me shows your vulnerability but the bow at the end shows your self worth and it is not shaken. Powerful words... You have a way. Patty
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

Thank you for noticing that

Thank you for noticing that Patty....in the mirror of you and I. I wrote another poem about mirrors this morning Patty. Btw did you know this picture of your dog and *baby* is making its way around the internet? ~A
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 7 months ago

~A

And yet another beautiful piece here Anna, Loved it! "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers
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R.M.Shanmugam

17 years 7 months ago

these mental demons are

these mental demons are stronger than my body’s bliss. I read and felt. the above lines are striking