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Lying Still

Lying still his

Body blankly waiting,

All better possibilities removed,

Discarded with the clothing.

 

Nothing left but

barren elemental acts,

With thinking chained to physic bits

Of skinscaped geographic facts.

 

Staging motion by the script

When emotion has now fled

There’s left a mere performance;

Not-bad acting playing in its stead.

 

Forgetting when,

over , done, and filled with doubt,

That the charge, not the parts

Brings ecstasy about.

 

Wanting by itself

Is insufficient reason.

Being attended by affection

Pleasures me to please him.

 

Reached for by attraction

Brings alive my blood

In all the tips where there without,

Passion cannot flood.

 

We’re better joined by hearts and minds

Which all the rest will follow,

Than trying only our skins to join

When under them is hollow.

— ArrowWords, Oct 12, 2008

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Country/Region: CAN

Favorite Poets: Dylan Thomas, Walt Whitman, Lawrence Ferlinghetti, Leonard Cohen, Constantine Cavafy

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Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

A.W.

Love in just the physical, is not love, but to meld two minds as one this is love. "Staging motion by the script When emotion has now fled There’s left a mere performance; Not-bad acting playing in its stead." I really enjoyed this particular stanza. Nice work. Welcome to the community of Neopoet! thanks, Eddie
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orgami

17 years 7 months ago

this is so stark and wonderful

reading lately or writing is bending my brain Reading your poem set me back But thats a good thing like made me sit slowly my mind engaged fascinated watching your words on the screen as I read them that feeling of delight god an actual feeling like some say i can see this being read dramatically via microphone monochrome visage play in my brain I really liked this poem a lot
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ArrowWords

17 years 7 months ago

From MindScreen to Mind?

Hi, Thanks for your comment. I am taken by "watching your words on the screen". I started to reflect on the images I had when I wrote it and the images I have now when I think about it again. It reminds me of a project I once had in mind to create a photo book of Fern Hill. Now I am wondering if it might be an interesting project to take or obtain photos or art copies that would be the visual of this poem. It would be tough to create images that do not box the reader/listener in, but it could be a fascinating exploration. Maybe it could work as a wide open collaboration of some sort. Thanks again. Cheers, Don