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shazbat
shazbat
Oct 09, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Un Dieu M'aident

 

I need someone to help me

To help me find my way

I need someone to show me

Where I went astray


 

Don't know where I'm going

Nor hardly where I've been

Life was just a blur

Life lived in a dream


 

Now I think I'm finally settled

With a woman I adore

But still beleaguered by the question

Is there something more ?


 

Will I hit the self destruct

As I've far too often done

Or live what time is left

With that question on my tongue

— shazbat, Oct 09, 2008

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Region, Country: Norfolk, UK, GBR

Favorite Poets: Kipling, T.S Eliot, Hilaire Belloc, Ogden Nash, Spike Milligan and many more.

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yenti

yenti

17 years 8 months ago

Shazbat

A reflection on life, and you are never alone, time and the Autumn of our lives bring to us regrets and thoughts of green grass that may have been, but the reality is as you have written it, and very well to, has to be faced with the reality of the now, where things we have, should be enough to hold us when Winter comes. Yours, Ian.T
shazbat

shazbat

17 years 8 months ago

Thanks for your comment, its

Thanks for your comment, its very much appreciated. Wasn't sure if this would convey the message I wanted it to, but it seems that it does, so thanks for taking the time to both read and comment. take care John
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pinksheep

17 years 8 months ago

The

rhythmn of this poem a dream, you can float on this poems rhythmn you can lay your head on the delicate cobwebs of its words and rest-How lucky the lady in your life is, if this poem is about yourself , is it? pinksheep
shazbat

shazbat

17 years 8 months ago

Hi Pinksheep

Yes it's about me, glad you enjoyed it and thank you for taking the time to comment.It's highly unlike me to be so introspective. It has been a long time since i've written anything (about 20 years) I expect to make the odd faux pas with some of my stuff, and it wont always be to everyones taste,but any positive comments are always welcome and hopefully will spur me on to bigger and better things. John
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pinksheep

17 years 7 months ago

John

i can assure you that you do not know what a faux pas is, i excel in these-i have not yet found a way of getting them deleted , though i have deleted most of my poems, and that took forever-