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Rett

Oct 08, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Love Blossoms

Love Blossoms

Around this silky rosebud
The crimson petals shine
I long again to touch it
Once more to make it mine.

I love to touch the blossom
It's fragrance so devine
To brush the blushing petals
Against these lips of mine

To caress the tiny bud
Uncovered deep within
Once more to feel the tremble
Battered by passion's wind

Again to see the wonder
As the flower unfolds
To drink the honeyed nectar
The loving blossom holds

To bask in sunlight sated
Fed by the sweetness there
To close my eyes in wonder
At petals oh so rare...

— Rett, Oct 08, 2008

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Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: Dickenson, Longfellow

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amalzamani

17 years 8 months ago

very romantic!

I just logged in and this is the first poem I saw in the stream!...how lovely! Title?...sounds nonspecific, don't you think? Language?...some lines may need some work! Excellent flow with romantic atmosphere and blooming roses...will make a wonderful gift on valentine's day...enjoyable one..thank you Rett.

17 years 8 months ago

Thank you Amalzamani

I will see if I can polish it up a bit more. I appreciate it. Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

17 years 8 months ago

Amalzamani

I think I have taken care of the rough spots and maybe the title is a little less ambiguous. Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

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amalzamani

17 years 8 months ago

excellent title

I like this title better...I think it's glowing now (smile)...well done!

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amalzamani

17 years 8 months ago

the first line!

I'm still not sure of the first line Like a rosebud so silky The crimson petals shine Perhaps Around this silky rosebud The crimson petals shine or something like that sorry but the word "so" always distracts me...and I keep thinking "how much is so?" just an idea...(smile)...if you did not like it, ignore it.

17 years 8 months ago

Oh my!

I like that line. Making the change now! Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

17 years 8 months ago

Hmm

I'll keep my gutter brain out of this one. "Like a rosebud so silky The crimson petals shine I long again to touch it Once more to make it mine" - I miss my flowers, too. Damn hurricane Hannah killed 'em all with too much water, and flooding. Only a couple bounced back - now I have a 2'x 16' strip, and two small plants in it.... *sniff* :~( ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "Everyone needs to believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" - "Due to budget cutbacks, the light at the end of the tunnel has been turned off."

17 years 8 months ago

Sorry about your flowers

You will be able to plant them back in the spring. Most of my flowers died out also, but the biggest part of the plants survived okay. elephant ears, rubber trees, airplane(spider) plants and the rest. Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

17 years 8 months ago

I'm glad JessK's got my back for gutterbrain,

I say no more. cheers, Jess

17 years 8 months ago

Rett

I too, will keep my attention to the petals. Rose is my favorite soft, subtle,and sweet Nice write here Rett I enjoyed it~ "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

17 years 8 months ago

Thank you Janice

Roses are beautiful, but the thorns can be tough to deal with. I appreciate it. Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

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prayersbyPatty

17 years 8 months ago

Good write Rett

Women are so like roses. Watch out for the thorns. very sensuous poem. I enjoyed it. Patty

17 years 8 months ago

Thank you Patty

And yes you are right. Women are very like roses, thorns and all. *G* Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

17 years 8 months ago

Thank you Janice

Yes, it is a love poem and I am glad you liked it. Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

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leonard daranjo

17 years 8 months ago

Lovely Piece Rett

I love the feeling you evoke with the rippling rhythm interlaced with beautiful nostalgic images. Leonard

17 years 8 months ago

Thank you very much Leonard

Glad you liked it. Some things are precious indeed. Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

yenti

17 years 8 months ago

Little Petal

I can just see you there sat out on the veranda, sat in your rocking chair, with a beautiful rose, clutched in your hand, left over from the storm, with tears rolling down your cheeks, Reflecting the light of the setting sun. Aint I bad to write that ????? Lovely piece Rett, you just keep on writing, I must let myself go into these places sometime they are wonderful. You take care there youngun, Yours Ian.T

17 years 8 months ago

Thank you sir

I try to always respect my elders you know. *G* Glad you liked it. You are VERY bad to write that. *LOL* Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

17 years 8 months ago

Rett

Smiles:) Barbara This is a beautiful love poem. I love the image here so sweet. The flow kinda stumble for me in the last line of stanza three and afterward. I have no suggestion on this, but the love here is beautiful even though being battered by passion wind.

17 years 8 months ago

Thanks Barbara

I must be battered by the wind as I can't find the stumble, but will keep looking. I appreciate your reading and commenting and will try to find where the stumble is. Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

17 years 8 months ago

Rett

Smiles:) Barbara It maybe just me as I tend to read poems sometimes in a rapid flow to the end. will come back and reread when mind mind stop slows down. Rough day more test scheduled for the ticker. bummer I reread and realize it simply me. love here is like a rose to be treated gently as you poem expressed beautiful image. pay me no mind. great poem.

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17 years 8 months ago

This

poem hase an ambience subtle , refined , gentle as silk , its' rhythmn perfect- my sincerest regards-

17 years 8 months ago

Thank you Pinksheep

I appreciate it. From all the comments the sublety might have come through a little too much. *LOL* I truly appreciate your reading and taking the time to comment. Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

CH

17 years 8 months ago

Perfect .....

Very well written ! Enjoyed it very much. Best wishes, Cindy

17 years 8 months ago

Thank you very much Cindy

I am glad you enjoyed it. Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

17 years 8 months ago

You know what really shits me about this?

Honestly man, I feel like calling you names for writing it, but I just can't. Fuckin' someone save us! This site is becoming senti-poetic. cheers, Jess

17 years 8 months ago

Like dancing,

a beautiful waltz. I'm very empress with this write, very moving at different levels. It show your soft silky side. You go boy!! Like everybody else on the first read. I went straight to the gutter. The second read was much more wonderful. Congrats on the light!! thanks, Eddie

17 years 8 months ago

Thank you Eddie

I appreciate it Eddie. There is gutter and there is beauty. I prefer beauty. Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

17 years 7 months ago

hmmm...

shall i venture down the road with a passing thought or stay and bask in it?...i think ill go with Jess K. on this one to...come to think of it...its kinda warm in here maybe some fresh air will help lol oh my... <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..."

17 years 7 months ago

and while concidering yourslef warned...

Read Dream Girl <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..."

17 years 7 months ago

Thanks Emarie

I appreciate it. Will read. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby" Rett: 2008

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Jasmine

17 years 7 months ago

OMG RETT

I just love this...oh it is so absolutely beautiful...hidden meaning...beautiful words...fantastic!!!!!!!

17 years 7 months ago

Thanks Jaz

Glad you enjoyed it. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby" Rett: 2008