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The Habit

In the distance you see love
in all it's splendor, calling to
you, enticing like a bakers
window displaying all it's
pleasures,

A dealer giving you a first taste,
you taste and it's like finding
buried treasure,

The heat of it's passion feels
as if you might melt.
Ooh! This pleasure you have
never felt,

It sings to you with the melody
of a lark.
Suddenly it starts, something
cold clutching on your heart,

The distance  is infinite, of this
pain, it's feels like the rug has
been pulled out  from under you,

You beg, scream, and threaten
you feel so much strife, you might
just  take your own life,

I curse you, why have you taken
that which gives me life!!!!

You have never felt so vulnerable.
Now your heart hardens and you 
feel invincible,

In the fire fueled by anger you have
burned everything that could be
memorable,

I will never love again, because
pain and loss are most certain.


— Eduardo Cruz, Oct 08, 2008

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Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

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Critiques

Rett

Rett

17 years 8 months ago

Whoah Eddie

Awesome read. Love is indeed a habit hard to break. Like smack and crack it grabs you quickly and soon the addiction has control of your whole being. I only have one little nit to pick about it. This line. "A dealer giving you a first tastes," It should read either "A dealer giving you a first taste," or "A dealer giving you your first tastes,". Totally caught up in this one sir. It had me from start to finish. Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 8 months ago

Rett,

I made the change and some others, thanks for the help,and your comment. Eddie
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 8 months ago

Leo,

bare is the only way for truth!!! thanks, Eddie
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

Eddie

Smiles:) Barbara Yes love is a habit, we tend to keep going back for more. This is really good, but I think it could flow a little smoother with a just a little work. Nice work enjoying your work
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 8 months ago

Barbara,

here it is nice and smooth. thanks for your help and glad you like it. Eddie
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

Wow this is great

Smiles:) Barbara Thanks for accept the critique. It is definitely smooth. One thing (tha) is it (that). I leave (r) off of (your) all the time drives me crazy.
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 6 months ago

Eddie

Good write. Habits, easy to learn, hard to break. As always, enjoyed reading your work.
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 6 months ago

Linda,

It's nice to know you enjoy my work! It's a pleasure to hear from you! thanks, Eddie
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 6 months ago

The Habbit...

the ultimate one too... many a sane person has gone over the edge due to the love "addiction"... but your character seems to have kicked the habit at the end... turned hard and bitter through the unending battles of the habitual feelings of love... sad... sadder still because I've felt that way during times of past defeats... nothing to critique here Eddie... can only say thank you for posting... Richard
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 6 months ago

Hey Richard,

We have all at one time or another and at different levels deal with this issue. but what I have learned is that the end responds is always one of four. you give up, you continue to fight, you start anew. you carry it for the rest of your life. thanks for your comment Eddie
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 6 months ago

The Habit

Eddie, Such a heart-wrenching write here, Your word portrayal, excellent Stanza 5, [don't hit me] I felt took away from your piece~ Just my thoughts~ _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 6 months ago

Janice,

you know something, I read it again and I felt you were right. I changed it and I think it sounds better at lease to me? Please,let me know? thanks, Eddie I appreciate your input! "I love animals, their just like meat"
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 6 months ago

The Habit

Don't mean to be so critical, but to me, a much better write! _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________