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The Habit
In the distance you see love
in all it's splendor, calling to
you, enticing like a bakers
window displaying all it's
pleasures,
A dealer giving you a first taste,
you taste and it's like finding
buried treasure,
The heat of it's passion feels
as if you might melt.
Ooh! This pleasure you have
never felt,
It sings to you with the melody
of a lark.
Suddenly it starts, something
cold clutching on your heart,
The distance is infinite, of this
pain, it's feels like the rug has
been pulled out from under you,
You beg, scream, and threaten
you feel so much strife, you might
just take your own life,
I curse you, why have you taken
that which gives me life!!!!
You have never felt so vulnerable.
Now your heart hardens and you
feel invincible,
In the fire fueled by anger you have
burned everything that could be
memorable,
I will never love again, because
pain and loss are most certain.
Critiques
Rett
17 years 8 months ago
Whoah Eddie
Eduardo Cruz
17 years 8 months ago
Rett,
leonard daranjo
17 years 8 months ago
Touching piece Eddie
Eduardo Cruz
17 years 8 months ago
Leo,
Barbara Writes
17 years 8 months ago
Eddie
Eduardo Cruz
17 years 8 months ago
Barbara,
Barbara Writes
17 years 8 months ago
Wow this is great
Eduardo Cruz
17 years 8 months ago
Barbara,
Linda Moses
17 years 6 months ago
Eddie
Eduardo Cruz
17 years 6 months ago
Linda,
themoonman
17 years 6 months ago
The Habbit...
Eduardo Cruz
17 years 6 months ago
Hey Richard,
Janice Pearce
17 years 6 months ago
The Habit
Eduardo Cruz
17 years 6 months ago
Janice,
Janice Pearce
17 years 6 months ago
The Habit