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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Oct 07, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

One Day Soon

One day soon

It will be all over
And time will tell
If our love will last
And then things that matter
Will be all right

It's 2 A.M.
And I'm  sitting here alone
Writing poems that made me cry
About the times we wasted
Arguing over nothing

But one day soon
It will be all over
And time will tell
If our love will last
And then things that matter
Will be all right

Its four A.M.
And my eyes are swollen shut
Crying over what we use to have
Thinking about the fights
That now so senseless

Baby one day soon
It will be over
And time will tell
If our love will last
And then things that matter
Will be all right

Yeah...the things that matter
Will be all right

— Barbara Writes, Oct 07, 2008

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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Rett

Rett

17 years 8 months ago

Barbara, I would love to

hear this sung. It has to be a song. So sad and melancholy, but yet beautiful. I can almost hear a soulful voice almost in tears singing this in my mind. Lovely, sad, but lovely too. Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

Rett

Smiles:) Barbara I would like that too, I wrote it as it came to me and sung it as I wrote it down about 3 am this morning. putting to music I have not a talent for. but like writing songs when they appear in me. Glad you like, thanks for responding.
D

DarkinAZ

17 years 8 months ago

I agree with Rett...

Nice write! only one thing "That now so senseless" did you mean "that now seems so senseless?" Your friend, Mark
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

Mark

Smiles:) Barbara You are right Mark, now seems so senseless is what I meant. My computer keep freezing when I tried to update early this morning so I gave up and went to sleep. Back to my normal can't sleep self. Glad you like I wrote two songs and a poem this morning, This is one of the songs. Doing better these days with my health.
LD

leonard daranjo

17 years 8 months ago

Great optimism here Barbara

This thread of optimism runs through most of your work. Yes it is required. We need to make sense in a senseless world or else our sanity will shatter like glass. Leonard
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

Optimism

Smiles:) Barbara I agree optimism is required sanity shattering like glass is a good line because we do what doing what can to keep it together is a must. thanks for sharing always appreciated
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

Lenny

Smiles:) Barbara thanks for commenting and sharing your thoughts it is much appreciated.
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 8 months ago

Barbara,

I've been with my wife since Noah's Ark went aground, the fights were what solidified our relationship, because we won't Quit on each other. I love her still like a sister, mother and wife. Girl, it ain't nothing but a chicken wing. thanks, Eddie 'If I fall off an over-look while I'm drunk, is that suicide"
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

Eddie

Smiles:) Barbara Not willing to give. that what love is I think. thanks for reading and commenting. you're always appreciated
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 8 months ago

Eddie nailed it bang on

Our scuffles have definitely made us stronger, as we begin to see the other person. We're starting to learn that effective communication helps us not to have these run-ins. Good luck! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "Everyone needs to believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" - "Due to budget cutbacks, the light at the end of the tunnel has been turned off."
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 8 months ago

Jess,

That's only experience talking, or is it my wife. Let me go wake her up and ask her. NOT!!! thanks, Eddie
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

Jess K

Smiles:) Barbara Communication the key to a successful marriage I think, but sometimes I learn from experience, can be use as a counter attack coming from a blindside. but no communication is worse, maybe I just get it wrong in the delivery hanging in both got to want it I think for it to work, just my take Thanks for commenting always appreciated.
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 8 months ago

You see that,

Congrats on the 'Spot light" Your on the ground and running Good for you!!! thanks, Eddie
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 8 months ago

Lovely write Barbara

a few little niggles already noted, the biggest one for me is "Its four A.M. in the morning" A.M. means morning, it's like saying "Its four in the morning in the morning". It really does work better as lyrics than poetry. cheers, Jess
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

Jess

Smiles:) Barbara Thanks for the niggle (am in the morning) sounds good to me but not (morning in the morning) didn't think of that will certainly make the changes. I think its better as lyrics also than poetry every so often music want to come of me. Happy to see your comments they were missed.
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 8 months ago

One Day Soon

Barbara, Ohhhhh, right from the heart here. Touching poem I agree, would make great lyrics for a song. "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers