Lenny of Cohen

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To Become A Monster

are you
one of the selected
FEW

have you been
enrolled
to have
a golden tongue

do you wear
the purple robe
and the crown of
annointed acceptance

how are your
words received
by your inner circle
are they sacred
to the chosen few

this monster has
become an absurd
black hole
of destruction

those
who are
sucked in
become enblazened
with their own vanity
fed by their egos
of arrogant attire

however
heed the words
of the deceiving serpent
you will be conceived
by your own tormenting
sacrificial fires

(C)2008 Lenny Gazbowski

— Lenny of Cohen, Oct 06, 2008

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Critiques

Mark

17 years 8 months ago

Lenny

I experience anger here. That be your your movement you write it very well ! you will / your will not sure there Later, Mark Man thinks this.

purplemoondoll

17 years 8 months ago

however heed the words of

however heed the words of the deceiving serpent you will conceived by your own tormenting sacrificial fires Watch your typing here my friend - conceived or conceive? Apart from that as always your poetry makes me think. I like these lines especially:- those who are sucked in become enblazened with their own vanity fed by their egos of arrogant attire How many times do we meet folk like that? In my job thankfully not often but they still exist. I could read this so many ways. It's great to see your work here again! Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

infinite_dwarf

17 years 8 months ago

I failed

The monster test. Oh well, maybe some other time. Nice to see you back posting again, Len. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "Everyone needs believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" - "Constipated people don't give a shit..."

blistered-pen

17 years 8 months ago

monsters.

I like this. what I got from it at first was a priest, or some man of God. then I thought about it more. the golden tongue. someone thinking that their words are worth more than others, when really, gold isn't worth much. also, it's not very attractive. (which could also be a priest right? believing his word is above all others?) the purple robe & crown. royalty? a king, a queen. anointed is what made me think of the whole man of God.. the inner circle. cardinals, again, men of God. the deceiving serpent, sacrificial.. I don't know. You got me thinking a lot. Thanks :) Kudos PS I also got a little confused by the 'you will conceived by your own tormenting sacrificial fires' is it 'you will HAVE' or 'you will BE'? Great stuff man

Lenny of Cohen

17 years 8 months ago

Must be the morphine!

I put any typos down to my morphine!I have corrected the last verse,hopefully it all fits! To Mark! My motive in this poem could include anger,as I was moved to write "TBAM" by a "kind" of anger (this is almost Metallicaesque!),and also frustration;so maybe you picked up on that!!! purplemoondoll!Hope I've addressed the typos!Glad you enjoyed the read,and love the dog-tis a bless moment! Infinite Dwarf! You failed the monster test!Which may be a good thing depending upon how its read,and what its meaning is;so you done good! blistered-pen:I don't believe we've met!So a big Liverpudlian hello from Lenny!!!I appreciate your comments and the thought and time which you've put into your words.I was inspired by anger to write this poem,and yet it has many different meanings;its real (mine) meaning will not be revealed - for now!I do use a lot of religious imagery in my writing,so what you wrote is absolutely fine. A big heartfelt thank you to you all for your time and comments.I shall leave this post with shock newa:- Lenny Gazbowski is now Reverend Lenny Gazbowski!!!HONEST!!! AND I'm going to see Leonard Cohen on November 22nd at Birmingham NEC,England - YIPPEE!!!

Kailashana

17 years 8 months ago

Cool! poem…cool

Cool! poem...cool reviews... cool collar and cool tunes... ~A

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

Lenny

Smiles:) Barbara I must say this poem to me reveals anger with the reality of a egotistical nature that hurts other. Your use of religious word doesn't evoke a religious poem to me, but vividly describes the heartache, one suffer at the hands of one with all the power though not a god per say. Sometimes people sacrifice each others for their own selfish gain. I see two types of people here the one hurting and the one causing the hurt. just what I see, your interpret may differ. Hope no one see me as the monster. just the coolest of brilliant.

Mark

17 years 8 months ago

Lenny

That's it ! The frustration. lol I related it to mine and most times with me anger annd frustration come along together. Truly, Mark Man thinks this.

Lenny of Cohen

17 years 8 months ago

Your comments

are all very much appreciated! kailashana! thanks for your input - and I love the red rose! Barbara! although I use religious imagery the poem is not religious in itself.Your thoughts on "TBAM" are very close indeed!Thanks for your time,words and effort. Mark! are we anger brother! LOL! Cheers Everyone, Reverend Lenny

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

TBAM?

Smiles:) Barbara I did not think it was religious because of the of the images it provoke you do well using those words in this way unusual but excellent style

Linda Moses

17 years 8 months ago

Lenny

The inner circle...other poets? very good piece, I will be interested to see your real meaning revealed. Congratulations on Rev. I am slowly working on mine.

Lenny of Cohen

17 years 8 months ago

My lips

will remain sealed....for now! Thank you for your comments Linda. Lenny

whitetea

17 years 8 months ago

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power does corrupt. wanted to ask a little more on this, what kind of authority are you writing about?

pinksheep

17 years 7 months ago

To

me this work is perceptive of human nature and you have written about matters in an extremely intelligent way-