Existential Angst

Smiles:) Barbara I love it, love it, love it Great write my friend

Smiles:) Barbara

I really like this - great vocabulary, imagery and flow. Just one suggestion is thats ok? Drop the stanza numbers and let it flow as one - I thinkit would read much better that way. As it stands the stanza numbers detract from the beauty of the poem. My favourite stanza is;- i reach out across vast tracts of memory to touch the beginnings This conjured a very strong image in my mind. Full of hope and possibility. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

Yes! Thats so much better! Scores five from me. :-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

"each and every day the wind writes its chronicles on the desert sand" - great stanza. Excellent write, Leonard. Forgive my ignorance, but you have this marked as a Japanese form. What form is it? ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "Everyone needs to believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" - "Due to budget cutbacks, the light at the end of the tunnel has been turned off."

I had thought that, and then dismissed it, because it was wayyyy too easy of a concept... duh! Love that title, btw. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "Everyone needs to believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" - "Due to budget cutbacks, the light at the end of the tunnel has been turned off."

Smiles:) Barbara Kaz suggestion really made it look good it flow from one haiku to the next with such smoothness. the first line is out of line with the rest is that intentional.

I liked them all, but the second and third one, my favorites. Wow unbelievable~ "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

Gee- I have yet to accomplish one and this is full them. I liked them all. But I liked the second and the last one... wow. Patty sprinkles stardust (if only she could) Patty

~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

It is definitely NOT existential Angst. It is, however a beautiful statement of the mystic's deepest belief, in a mystic's idiom. I would, for that, dare to suggest a different title, acknowledging the evident. That it comes as a set of linked haiku is kinda funny, from my angle on it, but it's a poetic trick you pulled off handsomely. I tip my hat in admiration of the demonstrated skill there, and vow never to challenge you to a duel using seventeen syllables.