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barbsdad2003
Oct 08, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

sidelong thought (haiku/senryu)


sidelong thought (haiku/senryu)

birds skitter across
sections of the patio;
I think of fishing

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Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 7 months ago

Chuck

Yea!! Great Haiku~ "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

Sweet!~A

Sweet! ~A p.s. and will you PULEEZE put some clothes on that kid.... it's getting cold!!! lol smile!
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Chuck

Smiles:) Barbara Nice Haiku While you think of fishing, I see you walking toward the patio with the days catch held high. Great image.
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

Chuckles

"birds skitter" what a peaceful image! Great haiku! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "Everyone needs to believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" - "Due to budget cutbacks, the light at the end of the tunnel has been turned off."
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Hi Chuck...

I think of fishing... I used to fish quite a bit, for years during summer months you would find me on a bank.. but I didn't ever care about catching fish too much.. it was for the relaxation meditation that went along with it... much like watching the birds skitter across the patio... enjoyed Richard
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amalzamani

17 years 7 months ago

irony?

How come birds make you think of fishing? thought provoking...enjoyable one...thank you Barbsdad.
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barbsdad2003

17 years 7 months ago

The birds did ...

not prompt thought of fishing. The thought intruded independently. As if to deny/ignore the otherwise pleasant sight before me. It's an easy habit to experience one thing tangentially in the present while thinking of something/somewhere/sometime else. Such behavior robs me/us of the richness available in current experience. I suspect most animals (other than humans) aren't shackled by such. Or at least not as much. Thanx, Chuck
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amalzamani

17 years 7 months ago

Interesting!

...you're right...it happens all the time...and I hope I can remember this b/c I always think that things are related/connected.
whitetea

whitetea

17 years 7 months ago

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what is a senryu, i'm curious. i like what you did here, it is gentle.
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barbsdad2003

17 years 7 months ago

Webster's:

senryu --- a 3-line unrhymed Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku but treating human nature usu. in an ironic or satiric vein. There you go. Perhaps I should make it "senryu" instead of "haiku/senryu." Thanx, Chuck
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pinksheep

17 years 7 months ago

This

word skitter has great a illustrative quality and an inflection that is an Icarus? anyway this word carries me, just simply takes me fast-
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Conect11

17 years 7 months ago

interestingly enough

I had thought just a few minutes ago... "which would I enjoy more; fishing, or a poem about fishing?" I must go fishing now to find out... Mark W.
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Chuck

Smiles:) Barbara I still like this poem. I don't fish never wanted to. Your poem makes me enjoy the idea of fishing
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rider68

17 years 7 months ago

Hi Chuck

Again..inspiring write, Regards... Peter ~~~"I am not afraid of tomorrow, for I have seen yesterday, and I love today."~~~
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barbsdad2003

17 years 6 months ago

I guess one ...

might say this piece demonstrates a sort of multitasking. I.e., noting birds skittering cross-patio while thinking fishing. Both at the same time. Now, if I were a bit more intelligent, perhaps I'd do three things at once. Next time, for a stretch, I'll try watching birds while thinking of fishing while rubbing my tummy. Just to see if I can. Thanx, guys. Chuck