Just Because You Exist

I would try "more blue" instead of bluer though. Just a suggestion. Enjoyed the read, Mark

this is very good... all the dull details take on a new role... loved that line! take on an aura... maybe "elaborate" or something like that inbetween an and aura. I just think it would flow better, but it may be just me... just a suggestion... either way it is a great read and I love the idea behind it.... Richard

I'm sorry, I guess I wasn't clear.. I wasn't suggesting changing any of your words.. I liked it very much... and I have felt it too and seen the vividness of new love and all of its freshness... your poem makes one feel it.. I was suggesting adding a word.. savoring being adored.. now I'm jealous... lol.. Richard

the simplicity, the pairing reflection of the structure, the theme, the feeling and the wholesomeness of love, I feel with you and pray for your continued happiness. This is good. Best wishes. T.

Short and Sweet. Reminds me of Bob Dylan's "If Not for You". Enjoyed the read. Leonard

expression of how love, particularly new love, makes everything else around you seem so vivid and full of life. The only suggestion i have is perhaps to try and avoid the repetition of "new" and to shorten the line "As if they have been painted" to keep a smoother flow. Perhaps something like: As if fresh-painted All the dull details take on a new role just because you exist. just a suggestion BW Keith