At the Knee: Shared

Yes, people do behave like this. The not looking; the honesty of kids. Not sure about the ending, but throughout you've not pulled any punches. Realistically descriptive poem. P.

You demonstrate here a real and rare talent: Of all the pieces I've seen posted at this site, this I believe to be the best. It's certainly my favorite. Marked by simplicity, matter-of-factness, clarity of description. You capture pieces of both outer and inner lives. You hint---and the mere hint makes it stronger than if it was more than that---at a kaleidoscope of feelings both expressed and suppressed. Absolutely---profoundly!---brilliant. Thank you, thank you, Chuck PS: As to title, I might suggest something like "little things on a bus" or "incident(s) on a bus" or "bus passage" or "small details" or "small matters" or "bus encounters" or "lives on a bus" or "bus microcosm" or "one universe on a bus" or "empathy" or "shame" or "hiding in plain sight" or ... I recognize that choosing/finding a title can be a tricky business here. (In fact, I'm not happy with any of my suggestions above; but perhaps one or more can prompt your brain in a good direction.)

I remember a film called Seawife and Biscuit it brought it back where I think the end was something like, You never look at the face of a Nun, mind you since that film I have. I was in an optician and at the counter was a chinese lady trying to get served, or being served, the optician or shop assistant did nothing else but shout at her as if she was deaf. We live in a strange world where people in wheelchairs have to be either shouted at or spoken to through another person. Your Poem brought it home, and hope lots read, and understand WHAT YOUR SAYING, LOL, sorry I shouted. The world, well if we behaved like humans, and respected all others and didn't keep looking for gain, or whatever, then this beautiful planet would indeed be beyond normal words, and only reflect the waves of love. Yours Ian.T

Full of reality. ~great imagery. I like the structure. The poem sliced into my heart. Thanks for th read. Suggestion for a title:"She Said OK" Rich

a raw look at the real world... leaves me sad because this is how it is, so many lonely souls out there not talking... looking out of bus windows deep in thoughts of their own ... very good write... title.. I don't know maybe something about the stories of the sad faces behind the windows... the image is very powerful and it sticks to me as it is something we've all seen or been... Richard

Re title: "Legless in L.A." - or is that insensitive? "Where did your legs go?"... "Encounter on a Bus".... "Disability Awareness".... "War Hero"...."Hero." MMM. Well I tried. Such a great write needs a title so don't give up on it. P.