themoonman

Sep 18, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Shadow's warm light

Perplexed by your shadow
it falls towards the sun
as if confusion might answer
any questions about love

It must be your aura
the splendid light it holds
illuminating around you
reflections that show

I was touched by the traces
gently covered by your quilt
I'm expressing my confusion
and reserve my right to be still

...but I just want to hold you
be warmed in your life
for me... there is no ending
only a question of time

— themoonman, Sep 18, 2008

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Critiques

infinite_dwarf

17 years 8 months ago

Richard

Really liked the opening stanza for this - as that would be something to be perplexed about. Shouldn't the 'Shadows' in the title be possessive: Shadow's?? ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- "Will there be another race to come along and take over for us? Maybe Martians will do better than we've done; we'll make great pets." - Perry Farrell

themoonman

17 years 8 months ago

Hi Jess...

I believe you are right... will be-a-fixin that... thank you for reading and commenting... Richard

Janice Pearce

17 years 8 months ago

Shadows warm light

Moon, I loved this one! "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

themoonman

17 years 8 months ago

Thanks Janice...

glad you liked it... this is an old write I've been working on and the title just came to me recently... appreciate your comments! Richard

Linda Moses

17 years 8 months ago

Richard

"There is no ending, just a question of time." Is beautiful. Isn't it something how, out of 26 letters, we can all come up with so many words.

themoonman

17 years 8 months ago

thanks Linda...

I am glad you liked it.. 26 letters! so many words ! I just love poetry... Richard

prayersbyPatty

17 years 8 months ago

Moonman, Wow

I really liked this one. My favorite line that reeled me in was, I reserve my right to be still....... Wow that's me when I am pondering confusion also. Thanks so much for sharing. This is a great poem! Patty

themoonman

17 years 8 months ago

Hi Patty...

good to see you and I am so glad you took something from this little write of mine and shared it with me... appreciate your uplifting comment more than you can know... Richard

themoonman

17 years 8 months ago

Oxymorons....

thank you for noticing how moronic the title was... I liked it too.. thanks Dale Richard

infinite_dwarf

17 years 8 months ago

Aye that I do!

That's almost as bad as the Cold Heat soldering irons.... LOL! My brain must have been asleep, as it didn't even jump out. You're sharp, man! Thank for keeping me in mind. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- "Johnny was a chemist’s son, but Johnny is no more. What Johnny thought was H2O, was really H2SO4...."

Electric Blue

17 years 8 months ago

shadow's warm light

Richard What can one say. This is exquisite, so touching a gentle wonder. I love the start. Perplexed by your shadow as it fall's again the sun. I conjures such tranquility of a moment captured in time. I was touched by the traces gently covered by your quilt. The inprint of the body leaving its warmth it essence - still shaped as if they are still there. Where you can feel the presences see and feel their aura. This is beautiful my dear freind. To touching. electricblue

themoonman

17 years 8 months ago

thank you Maggie...

I appreciate you taking time to read and comment... there are lots of poems on the site to choose from to read... thank you for that lovely comment... Richard

Arrow

17 years 8 months ago

My, my sigh

how gently erotic. That opening stanza is, indeed, a winner and that perplexity is brought nicely full circle with the mystery (for me) of the last line. What does time matter if there is no end? Just a couple of things - "special" light. There must be a better word for such a delicate yet powerful light. "Special" has been so damaged in its use by comedians and school systems. Also, I don't think you need line 11. You've already expressed your confusion masterfully in stanza 1. A much appreciated poem.

themoonman

17 years 8 months ago

Hi Arrow...

I appreciate you taking the time to read and leave your intuitive suggestions... special... you are so right... I must change that! I don't know if I agree about the confusing line 11, let me mull it over, and see if I can come up with something better... it may take a while, have been very busy as of late... crazy hours again! Anytime you want to read one of mine you are more than welcome... you have an open invitation to leave any of your thoughts and know they will be appreciated... thank you... Richard

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 8 months ago

Shadow falls towards the Sun

Hey Richard, that first line that's some intro. Like if they can out shine the Sun, that is perplexing. Nicely written Eddie "do like the barren tree: flourish. And like the planted seed: rise" By Jose de Deigo

themoonman

17 years 8 months ago

Hi Eddie...

thank you... I liked that line as well... appreciate your reading it and thank you for letting me know... Richard

leonard daranjo

17 years 8 months ago

Captivating Piece Richard

I love the way gentle, fragile way in which the poem moves as if not to disturb those delicate emotions. These last to lines bowled me over. for me… there is no ending only a question of time How true. These lines can be interpreted at many levels. Kind regards ... Leonard

themoonman

17 years 8 months ago

Leonard...

glad to see you and thank you for the comment.. your appreciation of the art of poetry is inspiring... makes one feel good...leaves me smiling. Richard

Ofira Sephiroth

17 years 8 months ago

Richard

This is a beautiful poem and you did a great job with the consistent flow of the piece. Ofira Sephiroth

themoonman

17 years 8 months ago

Hi Ofira...

thank you for your input... and I'm glad you liked it! Richard

pinksheep

17 years 7 months ago

What

i noticed about this poem was that its pace was exact-regards

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Hi Pink...

thanks for stopping by and reading... always appreciated... Richard

orgami

17 years 7 months ago

quilt

my grandmother made them (she was white) and they were great! I just read that line and though You know monsters bad dreams cold nights all one needs is a good warm quilt to keep one safe and that was it My quilt went ragged and was thrown out eventually it was yellow with tons of different fabrics etc on it Love your poem brought back the memory that I had forgotten about it

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Hi O...

I thank you for pointing out the line about the quilt, that is the way I associated it for the poem... glad you stopped in... Richard

pinksheep

17 years 7 months ago

Quilt

i think there is another poem on this site that talks of a quilt or uses the object of a quilt in an extremely interesting way , oh where was it now? Moon may i say title of this poem is absolutely delightful, i wish i had your expressive glow , i mean that-

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago