The Piper

Wow, I am the first to comment on one of yours? That's rare. Nice poem, friend. Sincerely, Mark

Go on yourself big yin!as a scotsman i just love this you wrote!can hear the words being sung with a pipe band!yahooo!cheers!keep up the good writes

C, The Piper can be taken many ways. I think you did that on pupose. What I think of is, the piper calling. The magic lure. My parents made sure to read me , The Pied Piper of Hamlin. Since then, I've heard, and followed, many a'magic tune. wcw

Enjoyed this, as WC said it does have some intriguing ambiguities Just one tiny thing bothered me a bit. The line- So far over my heart is tilting breaks the scansion. Not sure how to fix it. One less syllable? Crisper metre? See what you think. cheers, Jess

Long may he play your most intimate tune Lacy. The guys are right about the line "So far over my heart is tilting" it is 9 syllables instead of the 8 you need for this kind of strong rhythm, poetic ballad. It is easily remedied though by just saying "So far over my heart's tilting". Would make a good song i think...or may be you sing it already lol. Keith

A loving write, especially if it is where you want to be. Enjoyed your use of words and to the pipers tune, I hope your hearts desires are fulfilled. Lol. Lyz.XX