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weirdelf
weirdelf
Sep 15, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

I hate poems like this


   
One is the loneliest and most honest

Two we aspire to but seldom succeed

Three is that nasty god who made his son human to be tortured to death,

like all evil could be summed up that way?

and what’s the third spirit bit anyway?

Four is pretty cool,

four dimensions (not counting the other 17 or so already detected)

four directions

four elements of Wicca

four friends is cool.

Five is the pentagram

depends on your point of view and number of fingers

six is the star of David, and lots of Kabala

seven is lucky

fuck knows why, try

 http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lucky_number

eight and nine are parties

ten is...

well count your fingers,

different species different number

no-one cares about eleven
though it is fun mathematically

twelve is magical almost, in it's usfefulness

thirteen has lots of references

 Ah, I guess I’m not much into numerology

 And I didn’t even get started. 

Except to say
that some say
the fall of the Roman Empire was because they didn't recognise zero
Nothing
Naught

 



 
— weirdelf, Sep 15, 2008

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Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

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Mark

Mark

17 years 8 months ago

Zero is easy to spot, spot

woof, I wonder if animals recognize numbers. They must, like when they are outnumbered 13 to one, how unfortunate ! ::laughs here:: thanks for that Mark
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 8 months ago

it's actually true

that Roman mathematics, hence their stolen Greek science failed because they refused to accept the number 0 cheers, Jess
W

W.C.Wampler

17 years 8 months ago

It's just not edited

Weirdelf, you're rambling. You don't like poems such as this, because they're not done. Even if you're finished with it. You have some serious thought in there, and you count in order, but you try to cover too much ground with not enough carefully chosen words. Of course, if your intent is to rile folks up by critisizing supposedly important beings, you may succeed at that. But, it should be written better, and have a working title. OOPs! Did I just blurt out my opinion? I did! I hope you don't mind. wcw
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 8 months ago

You blurted and I am glad you did.

Sometimes I get an idea in my head (like one of those songs that won't go away) and I had to write this one down. Your criticism is spot on, it needs editing. One thing you don't know, simply because you don't know me and my body of work, is that I seldom miss a chance to take a poke at the morbid religion we call Christianity, or any other organized religion for that matter. poets and scientists are not atheists, we are just the ones who are still looking. cheers, Jess
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orgami

17 years 8 months ago

coating faces in lead

romes one big concern was everyone wore the toga slave and master and what if you slapped the wrong one my change came back to me 666 forgot the decimal point Fermi wonders where the intelligent life is Personally i wonder I wouldnt come too near we escape and populate from zero the billions From Lucy wandering under the light of the moon to escape the heat in her robes to the upstart whom they crucified and the theif but who remembers the thief yes the pentagram the Masons whom my father was a member the shriners the ancient ones the orders i make poems what am I in the end but a zero that decimal place upon the existance of decimal place the single cell that divided why? P.S. I like weirdelf and his poetry including this one
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 8 months ago

huh?

It's really early, and this just totally flew over my head.... will come back and read when I'm coherant. This did stand out, though: "the fall of the Roman Empire was because they didn’t recognise zero." - what, and Persia DID?! Come now.... ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- "I just read an article on the dangers of drinking.... Scared the crap out of me. So that's it! After today, no more reading!" - Lex M.
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poewriter58

17 years 8 months ago

Jess

As expected your usual more than words on paper meaning by the numbers I see Chrys
PF

Poetic Fluffer

17 years 8 months ago

Countdown...

I hate poems like this too... I rather like epigrams or haikus they much shorter and straight to the point. To recognize zero is to know there is nothing before or less than --unless one was poor... intresting and different write, mr. elf. thanks for sharing it anyhow. ~Pfluffer
Mark

Mark

17 years 8 months ago

Nothing is nothing

but a one 1 with two zeros folowing - 100 is a lot especially if we are talking check book lol Zero is not nothing nor poor it is fabulous in the decimal system. It is a number, Mark
Marius Surleac

Marius Surleac

17 years 8 months ago

Well done Jess!

I like this one Jess. When reading this poem I remembered the pleasures of mathematics, playing with numbers - it is like a mental orgasm for those who like the science of the numbers. I come with the idea that is quite brilliant and everyone knows it (if playing with maths) that many elements from nature are governed by Fibonacci’s numbers. P.S. Do you know that all over the world there are people that have phobias for different numbers and their manifestations received scientifically names with categorization? Well done my friend! Cheers, Marius
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 8 months ago

Thank you Marius

my favourite phobia is arachybutyrophobia- the morbid fear of peanut butter sticking to the roof of your mouth, I have suffered from it when stoned. cheers, Jess
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 8 months ago

Jess

Oh my goodness, I just choked on my coffee! What a fear to have come up when you're already in a strange state, eh? I've read (and re-read, and read AGAIN!) this poem, and it gets better with every read. I'm slowly getting the grasp of what you're saying, and dammit, you make a good argument! I'm impressed. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- "If you've ever emptied the back of your pickup truck by driving backward really fast and slamming on the brakes, you might be a redneck" - Jeff Foxworthy Bill Engvall: "that's how we moved"
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barbsdad2003

17 years 7 months ago

Great subject ...

you picked here. Sans editing amounts to a sort of semi-random orderliness. I'm impressed that you flew this to paper. Nice job, that. As to the poke at religion (and contrary to typical fundamentalists' preaching, I do consider Christianity, even their blindered version, a religion), I salute. Such pokes're my forte. Though for the most part they go unacknowledged by others. Don't know whether they hear me ... or don't want to. I've allus been impressed that the zero carries such critical importance. After all, there're quite a few zeros in Congress here in the U.S., and we've had a zero for president for it feels like centuries now. It'd seem zeros can ruin a nation ... and p'raps the world. Can't allus tell whether that's their intent or that they just don't know any better. It's nice to be reminded (by your piece here) that zero can be critically important in a good (read: productive) way. Kudos, Chuck
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 7 months ago

Aw Chuck thank you,

I'm afraid this poem is going to remain un-edited, like I said, 'twas a noise to remove from my head. The reason people don't comment on your pokes at religion is because they don't want to see them, which is why I use a sledgehammer where you use an intelligently prying finger. Both are of value in the long run I believe. Let no beliefs, first of all mine, go unchallenged! Silence is the loudest noise. cheers, Jess
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orgami

17 years 7 months ago

I will pray

in the end i do believe Jesus did die for a reason he was a good man there is a god he has always been here with all the insanity going on thats just mans doing satan was cast here and hes busy especially here on the net I will ascend when the end comes I pray therefore I am
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R.M.Shanmugam

17 years 7 months ago

the fall of the Roman Empire

the fall of the Roman Empire was because they didn’t recognise zero Nothing Naught These lines cap the poem. cheers i hope by now you are cool with me as i already wrmed myself. cheers
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Tink

17 years 7 months ago

interesting jess

i must say this is a very interesting and different poem, not what i expected which is good. i enjoyed reading it. you make some great points on stuff i've thought about before, but never gave a second one to. thank you.