If I Were Authentic Would I Be More Like You?

Wild geese
like thought formations
return

— Kailashana, Sep 15, 2008

Critiques

Kailashana

17 years 10 months ago

Here’s the rest of the

Here's the rest of the poem: Authenticity Tell me true, my friend, you seem to know all the *right* answers, you give so freely without hesitation without reservation, When did *I* lose my ground of being when did I buy into a world of differences? If I were authentic would I be more like *you*? Your Doctrine of Selfhood, what must I do to earn it? Must it meet your approval? Do you have guidelines for me to follow? wild geese like thought formations return

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

Fuck me dead!

You really did say all that in three lines but extraordinary to hear it in full verse. I think I am in love with you, but like Buffy and Angel, we are worlds apart. cheers, Jess

Kailashana

17 years 10 months ago

Lol. Yeah. I wonder how

Lol. Yeah. I wonder how that happens...! But thanks... and don't make the mistake I did once... I fell in love with the poet in the man... but the man was nothing like the poet. I wrote a poem about it...called "Never Fall In Love With a Poet". It does bring up an interesting point however, Jess. Would the folks who resonate on this *matrixed* level, do so in person? Questions. ~A

orgami

17 years 10 months ago

fan base

Such a beautiful name you use here this land of thought formation cruising in slipstreams millenium angels pounding the feathered air arcing dream intuitions beyond my lost visions

Kailashana

17 years 10 months ago

Ah… my dancing

Ah... my dancing partner... the land of visions floats by like debris in an ocean of dreams ~A

infinite_dwarf

17 years 10 months ago

Anna

Needed to read this just for the title alone. I was expecting some deep rooted philosophical stuff that would knock me on my ass! I'll settle for geese, though, as they're beautiful creatures. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- "I just read an article on the dangers of drinking.... Scared the crap out of me. So that's it! After today, no more reading!" - Lex M.

Kailashana

17 years 10 months ago

Dunno if it was deep or

Dunno if it was deep or philosophical Jess, but the *rest* of the poem is under the 3 lines as my *reply*. Missy, are you paying attention? lol. Hugs, Your other mom, ~A

Arrow

17 years 10 months ago

For me,

the original poem speaks to how hard it is not to think/behave outside of how one's been institutionalized. Reminds me of when I was a teacher and I received a number of lectures about "not flying with the V-formation." One of the best itsy-bitsy poems I've read.

Kailashana

17 years 10 months ago

Ha! It takes a lifetime to

Ha! It takes a lifetime to understand that we're either in a herd or a pack mentality. After that... it's bird-flight.... it's not such a bad thing, is home North or South? Besides birds fly light as air. ;-) ~A p.s. I think it's one of my best itsy-bitsy poems.

Kailashana

17 years 10 months ago

When is a thought not a

When is a thought not a thought? In a herd or pack mentality? I think birds fly across the sky and leave no mark of passing; however the car and the head sometimes are left with little tokens of appreciation. I too think of it as one of my best itsy-bitsy poems. I love these birds, don't you? ~A

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