Janice Pearce

Sep 14, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Liquid Devil

In amber pools
it flowed,
gentle as
a brook

Alongside of it
I lay,
as a submissive
lover would

I sipped the
luscious bubbles
so cold upon
my lips

The peace
I found in
new-found love
soon had me
in her grip

I had been seduced
preyed upon,
by weakened will

M world turned
upside down
experiencing a
living hell

Amber pools
no longer flow
they've dried
like arid desert

I had to sever
all the ties
to my former
lover;
liquid devil

— Janice Pearce, Sep 14, 2008

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Critiques

Janice Pearce

17 years 8 months ago

Liquid Devil

indiscretionate, Thank you for taking the time to read,and your kind words~ Always appreciated sir! "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

themoonman

17 years 8 months ago

Janice...

the liquid devil... about half way through I was thinking she is talking about drinking... seduced, preyed upon... been in those amber pools before... like indiscretionate said... you said it well... Richard

Janice Pearce

17 years 8 months ago

Hey Moon

Thank you once again, for commenting and your comments. As always it's nice to know you always have the time for others! "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

rider68

17 years 8 months ago

Hi Janice

A Masterful write, Beautiful and descriptive, clever and somewhat deceptive but I'm sober enough to realise.....exactly what you meant, It's always a pleasure to visit, Hope you are well Janice Kindest regards..... Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

Janice Pearce

17 years 8 months ago

Hello Peter

Thank you! My father was an alcoholic and I had to be careful with respect to the quanity of alcohol I drank. Glad that you enjoyed this one~ Thank you once again for your comment~ "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

Arrow

17 years 8 months ago

As always,

you've written a vivid, accessible poem that I really like. The only suggestion I'd make is to be a little more consistent with the meter. For example, In amber pools it flowed, gentle as a brook (Alongside it, I lay, slavish as a lover.) Or, not. I just can't refrain from making suggestions and I'm a meter freak. Good work.

Janice Pearce

17 years 8 months ago

Arrow

Don't ever be shy about meter, or suggestions for a better piece! I need the input to become better. Thank you so much! Any other editing here? "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

Kailashana

17 years 8 months ago

Liquid lover… sometimes I

Liquid lover... sometimes I think that we are all drunk...and just don't know it. And somehow having this need is evocative of our origins: our birth waters... the cosmic womb. Thank you, Janice. ~A

Janice Pearce

17 years 8 months ago

~A

As always, Your comments are always appreciated! You have a great sense of humor too lol! "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

infinite_dwarf

17 years 8 months ago

Janice

Love the title, as it is so apropos (when abused). Once again, you've spun some pretty nifty magic out of words. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- "I just read an article on the dangers of drinking.... Scared the crap out of me. So that's it! After today, no more reading!" - Lex M.

Janice Pearce

17 years 8 months ago

Liquid Devil

Jess, Once again, thanks for your compliment~ Like your comment by Lex M! "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

prayersbyPatty

17 years 8 months ago

Jan

It sure is.................... I really liked this one, My father drank also, I had fallen to this temptation, but not for very long...... Thanks for calling it what it is..... Patty

Janice Pearce

17 years 8 months ago

Liquid Devil

Patty, or is it Patricia? Thank you so much I'm glad you liked it and, as always I appreciate your kind words~ "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

prayersbyPatty

17 years 8 months ago

Jan or Janice?

My sisters and brothers always called me Patty, Patricia sounds so male. Since I refuse to grow up, Patty fits. Thanks for asking Patty

Janice Pearce

17 years 8 months ago

Patty

Either Jan, or Janice will do, I am not a formal person! "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

odiumscurse

16 years 10 months ago

Wisdom!

Nicely written theme! wicked titel. T.S

Janice Pearce

16 years 10 months ago

Liquid Devil

T.S Thanks for reading and your comment, always appreciate the feedback sir~ ____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous