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Rob Graber
Rob Graber
Sep 17, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

young love

i just saw them:
two young lovers holding hands
walking, talking
walking, talking
on their cell phones 

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whitetea

whitetea

17 years 7 months ago

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There is a certain kind of innocence in seeing that. Seeing people before they are introduced to all the complications and confrontations of love and partnership. Its sad. It feels like in some ways it would be wonderful for it to stay like those young people walking down the street carefree and maybe a little unaware. Good write.
Rob Graber

Rob Graber

17 years 7 months ago

Unaware indeed!

They surely appeared totally uconnected, except by the hands not holding the phones... Thanks!
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easylife_2

17 years 7 months ago

Good write

There's a connection in their unconnectedness as per the hand holding which gives the poem a certain kind of quality.Thank you.
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Rob...

short and to the point.. disconnected except for being together... those damn cell phones.. everybody's talking.. nobody watching or listening... I can see the young couple... Richard
Rob Graber

Rob Graber

17 years 7 months ago

Thanks! It was a passing

Thanks! It was a passing visual image that I hoped would make a haiku, but I couldn't seem to compress it enough.
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abrelosojos

17 years 4 months ago

i love these short witty

i love these short witty poems!! this happens all the time too lol fragile things: take flight!
Rob Graber

Rob Graber

17 years 4 months ago

Thanks!

Thanks! I was afraid this one might come off as a bit geriatric; nice to hear postively from one so young (and talented)!