What if...

I liked the title, and the theme. You said a lot with a few words. Nit Pick:It could be a wee bit tighter:like amazed...I wondered/ I think we is enough(the people of earth) can be figured out by the audience striking out "so"/"and" would make it even tighter, a very concise poem. I dunno, what do you think? Rich

What if? Sometimes it's the what if questions that truly define us... do we take the time to consider possibility .....to question our absurdity. Well done~ ~Anna

You hit the nail on the head with the question of whether we'd be the same greedy pigs as before. Hell, we've done a good job of destroying Earth; time to move on, right? Nice work, man. ~Jess ---------------------------------------------------- "Live every day as if it were your last; one day you'll be right...."

I think we would be just as greedy. This is good,Richard

i think greed comes from an inherent emptiness that we all feel... so we try to fill it with acquiring *stuff*: material/spiritual/knowledge/information....in the end if we haven't learned how to care for one another... how to *love* none of it means much,as it all disappears one day. what we have done to one another since time immemorial is all about greed... and it is nonetheless, the *stuff* of evolution. will there be a quantum leap, so to speak, of humanity? interesting to think how that would look. ~anna

Thought provoking Very nice piece here Richard! I liked the beginning, middle and end! "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

Very thoughtful writing my friend, often I have thought alone those lines, and every time I do, I hear space people saying, God help us......the're on there way, and I'm sure we will manage somehow to f..k that up as well, Tilting my Hat, Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

Just to reach the stars'd stoke a new gold rush, a swell of greed, for fresh realms to rape/plunder. And since the stars seem limitless in number, we could thus metastasize our inexorable human cancer's reach incredibly far, far beyond the earth we've already left to its sorry state of dust/ashes/polluted waters ... and wars and systemic pesticides, among other charming goodies. A cheery thought Thinks cheerful Chuck

Does indeed make one think. This leads to any number of questions. Haven't we screwed up and are continuing up. Wonder where the f..k all this will end? We are the Frankensteins of our own monsters. Great piece!!! Leonard

As did everyone else, it would seem. I do have one suggestion, structure wise. The last line feels like it bogs down to me. It increases in length and presentation and almost feels as if too many words are be packed too close together. I would not change any of the words but i might change the structure so as to add mini-pauses and more focus to the final words. this is what I mean: --------------------------- I shake the thought so I can still see the beautiful, the natural embodiment of Life, and our endlessly evolving universe. --------------------------- Something to consider and discard at your leisure --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)