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Rain

1.

the scent of rain
falls
inside the thunder
of my mind,
I close my eyes
and breathe the silence

2.

light breaks through
the forest canopy
presence is everywhere


3.

nondual erotica was
a red dragon that fell
asleep in my untamed heart
he awakens
i am nowhere to be seen



— Kailashana, Sep 05, 2008

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Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 9 months ago

Just beautiful

Smiles:) Barbara Well written small piece. i really enjoyed the first one, it sucked me in relaxing my stress out mental state.
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

I try to...

Anna I try to figure out the message, but couldn't. Please can you throw more light. Forgive my ignorance. Words are well used and the messgae is deep beyond my comprehension. Cheers, T.
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easylife_2

17 years 9 months ago

I get your

message up to the 2nd stanza but I was lost on the third,could you please elucidate foa a poor discerning mind,I would really appreciate.Thank you.
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 9 months ago

hmmm. as usual, poems have

hmmm. as usual, poems have a personal and a universal meaning. The personal meaning will go undisclosed. The universal meaning is that once the gates of love have opened in oneself, one's Lover is ever-present, and one feels that unifying bliss as one's own life. Thank you all for your gift of reading and asking. ~A
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barbsdad2003

17 years 9 months ago

Words like ...

scent, falls, thunder, close, breathe, light, breaks, red help make this piece rich, rich, rich with sensuality. I daresay you portray a lusty love that so overwhelms who you are normally, that you lose yourself. A sort of erotica gone amok. This appears, to me, to be celebratory. Though I know I may be wrong in that assessment, since it's capable of being a brandished sword two-edged. Sharp, succinct, beautiful. Thanx, Chuck PS: I'm hopeful library filters (censors) will allow me past now to post, esp. with my use of the word erotica. You know, Big Brother's determined to protect me ... from myself.
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 9 months ago

When I first joined Neopoet,

When I first joined Neopoet, I had problems with posting.... as a result I subscribed under different names in order to post my poems. Some of my first poems *disappeared* when all three identities (Anna Ruiz, Kailashana and Anabebe) were integrated. Picasso was such a poem. I'll post it here... and I'll post it on the Stream. It is my *story*. Love. Anna PICASSO Picasso had his way with me last night He rearranged my face and I awakened To an altered Reality. My left eye was like a Star of Bethlehem Shining in the back of my head That I may see where I have been, To be assured— To answer my question— Have I been walking along the right Path? And I was blessed with 20/20 hindsight, An optical illusion, How the darkness meets the light. My right eye was just under my left foot, Gathering dust from the ground I still walk upon, Even as my soul wanders into an ever-present, Dark infinity, just beyond my tenuous grasp Into daybreak, Into the songs of a meadow lark, Into the blades of grass, my homecoming A masterpiece in vibrating colours and mystical Sounds. My nose disappeared altogether, It clung to the seascape just ahead of me, Breathing deep from the ocean, The deepest blue, And the brine had marked its passage Along the bridge, And I saw a starfish bow, and The songs of kelp were turquoise, with Smatterings of fuchsia. And I wondered what he did with my lips, Were they sealed in some blooming desert? Amoung the parched white bones of frightened creatures Burned by the sun? Were they hanging on the cross, Painted in the timber? Silenced for eternity? Picasso rearranged my face last night, And freed my lusty soul. (This is the second poem in my waiting-to-be-published book "The Dawn Tree". My publisher is having financial issues.)
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

ah, that's better

gonna flounder around here a bit but it srikes me as the primal power of nature exceds all erotica. Even if I got it wrong I love the poem, cheers, Jess
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 8 months ago

Jess, I should think you

Jess, I should think you understand.... the poet IS the power of erotica... s/he is true to her/his own nature... and that is erotic... stimulating and creates PASSION. EH?
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orgami

17 years 8 months ago

Sitka spruce

gonna humble me ever i get under that forest nothing like rain in the woods the sound coming through the leaves the limbs not like feilds i used to stand in the feild in the rain at night way out in the country where i lived for a bit pitch black fallen down rain the forest line a thousand feet away the ridge rising up and blacker then night wolves up there bears rain can still feel it smell it the music
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 8 months ago

ahh.. orgami…. you know

ahh.. orgami.... you know the *far* country....;-) You have inspired me once again... Thanks. Rain I shed a tear become One in You reaching for You I am lost in all that sea, a forest melody without rhyme or reason, without field of clover the scent of Heaven like heavy dew on my mind. ~Anna