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themoonman
themoonman
Sep 05, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Open Eyes

Do you believe in magic
tip the scales and see
do you believe in what you have
do you believe in me

I'm the Shaman here from long ago
I am the Hoo-Ha Voodoo seed
just take a moment, say you know,
and set this demon free

There is no escape, nowhere to run,
no place that I can't reach...
I'll weave a magic spell on you,
and you'll belong to me.

I'm the crave in all your cravings
you are the magic that's in me
I'm the Shaman here from long ago
Open Eyes
.... give me what I need
— themoonman, Sep 05, 2008

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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t. reflexion

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

Open Eyes

Richard In 'Open Eyes', the poet is a magician with Hoo-Ha Voodoo seed. His proposition does not give his lover any choice and there is nothing the lover can do. In Nigerian parlance, 'open eyes' means being authoritative, commanding, and imposing. This, the poet has demonstrated that he is the master. If we put his position against the feminist trend of equality of sexes and complimentary roles in a relationship, then we have come to a brick wall. The kind of relationship where the woman or the man does not have a say could be lopsided and therefore may lack excitement. I like the poem as it shows the macho that we have in relationships in Africa and I belief elsewhere in the world. Best wishes. T.
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 9 months ago

T...

I appreciate your detailed look into this write... and thank you for reading and commenting... Richard
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easylife_2

17 years 9 months ago

Very well written sir!

You hardly leaver your 'lover' any chice,you have enraptured and encapsulated her in all allures of your magic.I consider this write a very good one,and I agree with T on every count.Another very good one sir!
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easylife_2

17 years 9 months ago

Very well written sir!

You hardly leave your 'lover' any chice,you have enraptured and encapsulated her in all allures of your magic.I consider this write a very good one,and I agree with T on every count.Another very good one sir!
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 9 months ago

understanding

Richard, Let me start by saying that I really enjoyed it. It seems to me that in the first verse you already have this person, but there love is in question. In the second verse it's like your asking them to look into themself, because you are there. In the third verse it sounds like you'll do what ever it takes to keep them, because you love them and they you. now you take control and tell them, that you are both one single being that can never be separated. Is that where you were going, if it was then damn that was good. if a man does not know love, he does not know God
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 9 months ago

Eddie...

this was just a fun write for me that sort of blurted onto the page.. Most of my poems about love are about my wife, this one is about the look that I hope to keep receiving from her.. so , yes... your interpretation is right on the money... appreciate your in-depth look into this write... Richard
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

Open Eyes

Moon, oh you little devil you! I enjoyed this one from you~ "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 9 months ago

Richard

This is AWESOME! Well done. ~Jess ---------------------------------------------------- "Live every day as if it were your last; one day you'll be right...."
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

17 years 8 months ago

open eyes

Richard I just love this. As you know such cravings such desires I know where your at my friend. maggie Electricblue
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muttering_madwoman

17 years 7 months ago

creeping

and soothing at once safety in the face of power, shelter in storm, yet wind whipping through the hair as that shelter was but the eye of the storm. love this one a fun smooth read, to boot N